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If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer?
We all desire the best for our hometown, after all this is the place that we should be proud of, and always brag about. If I have the chance to change anything about my hometown, I would definitely change the smoking policy.In my hometown , smoking is allowed almost everywhere; in coffee shops, in restaurants, in some pulic transportations and sometimes even at certain work places. The fact that makes me feel miserable as smoking has several disadvantages that my hometown could be exempt of.
First of all,the risks of smoking are tremendously serious, and should not be ignored. Smoking can ...
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Sentence: Unfortunately many people spends their money on cigarretes instead of spending them on something more beneficial.
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Sentence: Smoking can lead to the most dangerous life threatening diseases where Cancer is on top of them. my country can play a major role in detering such risks by disseminating certain rules and regulations that prohibit the smokers from smoking everywhere.
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Sentence: Secondly,smoking is obviously an awful habbit in which a person can easily get attached to, and unfortunatly very hard to quit thus I think that my country should be particularly more strict about this, aiming to tame bad smoking habits from the get go. this could be accomplished by further educating the people through prochures, lectures, TV and radio shows and so on.
Error: unfortunatly Suggestion: unfortunately
Error: prochures Suggestion: procures
Error: habbit Suggestion: habit
Sentence: If I have the chance to change anything about my hometown, I would definitely change the smoking policy.In my hometown , smoking is allowed almost everywhere; in coffee shops, in restaurants, in some pulic transportations and sometimes even at certain work places.
Error: pulic Suggestion: public
Sentence: Unfortunately many people spends their money on cigarretes instead of spending them on something more beneficial.
Error: cigarretes Suggestion: cigarettes
Sentence: Those money that are spent on buying packs of cigarretes can be more of a value if donated to hospitals, nursing homes, schools and hence contributing in building a better hometown.
Error: cigarretes Suggestion: cigarettes
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No. of Words: 310 350
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Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.196 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.765 4.6
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No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
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Sentence Length SD: 15.45 7.5
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Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.679 0.50
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