In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea. Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details
In the recent years, the number of teenagers working while they are students has been on the increase. Although some people say that having jobs while being a student will bring some problems for their study and health. I personally think that this trouble has both positive and negative sides.
On the one hand, working while studying gives us some beneficial aspects. First of all, students can learn how to arrange their timetable in order to harmonize their study with job. Thanks to time management , they can control of their time to increase effectiveness, efficiency,productivity, especially if people have this skill, they can prevent time-wasting.The second positive side is that students are able to gain realistic experience.For instance, if they work as waiter, they have more chance to meet and communicate with many people, which not only helps them makes new friends but also knows how to behave politely, what words we should say or not.Besides , some words as “hello”, “thank you”, “sorry” should be used fluently. Finally , part-time job helps us manage our budget. It cannot deny that earning money independently. Students will know how hard-working to make money is and because of it , they use money properly and consider before purchasing something carefully.
On the order hand, teenagers working while they are students brings about disadvantages. Firstly, academic performance of these students can be affected.When they can earn money by themselves, they may think money is more crucial than their studies. This will result in the fact that they may spend time than concentrating on school work. They will end up with job, not a degree. In addition, students’health is also affected by working and studying at the same time. These students feel exhausted after hard work, which also may lead to skipping classes for making up for lost sleep.
In summary, students’working part time is always a controversial issue. This problem has both two opposite side. I admit that there are several benefits to working while studying. However, they have to harmonize study and job and recognize that study is the main responsibility and it decides their future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, so, while, for instance, in addition, in summary, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 1.00243902439 1496% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 43.0 5.60731707317 767% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 965.302439024 191% => OK
No of words: 351.0 196.424390244 179% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25925925926 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 3.73543355544 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05437075649 2.65546596893 115% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 106.607317073 192% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584045584046 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 283.868780488 195% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 1.53170731707 849% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 8.94146341463 212% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 111.539143844 43.030603864 259% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 97.1578947368 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4736842105 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 1.69756097561 766% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.13902439024 527% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231190660938 0.215688989381 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783459264493 0.103423049105 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479161811074 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170905365053 0.15604864568 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513660500994 0.0819641961636 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.2329268293 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 61.2550243902 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 11.4140731707 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 40.7170731707 196% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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