Young people now spending more and more time and money following fashion trends. Is this a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, spending a lot of time and money on fashion trends of young people has been receiving a great deal of public attention. Although this problem is not without advantages, the downsides will be far more significant.
There are a multitude number of reasons why following luxury items will be a positive development. First, since teenagers usually want to define themselves, buying and updating the latest fashion trend is necessary. This means that they will gain a lot of attention from their friends, which helps them more confident. Second, if the young tend to spend a great amount of money on their clothes, the national economy will be boosted. For example, as the fashion industry is lucrative, the government should impose a higher tax on this field, which substantially increases the national budget.
Nevertheless, there are a vast number of reasons why being a slave to fashion would be a negative trend. First, if people invest more in clothing, there will be a great number of wastes produced every day. In fact, materials used to make clothes contain many components, such as nylon or polyester, which are hardly decomposed, causing detrimental impacts on the environment. Second, by engrossing in high-end items, the youngsters might lose track of time. This means that they usually think of the ways to become more fascinated, therefore, they do not have enough time for other priorities, such as studying or expanding social circles.
In conclusion, although investing in a new fashion trend would be beneficial to some extent, I strongly believe that this can contribute to a host of drawbacks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a new fashion" with adverb for "new"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1360.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1320754717 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81923919659 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607547169811 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.5241994019 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.615384615 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3846153846 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325042922983 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100887799098 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625830861149 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199789620084 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837725051049 0.056905535591 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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