The graph below shows the percentage of people in different age groups in one city who attended music concerts between 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph compares the proportion of people in different age groups in one city who participated in music concerts from 2010 to 2015.
Overall, the interest of people about attending music concerts was on the increase, with the exception of those from 55 to 64. In addition, it is obvious that people under 25 contributed a great deal of the percentage of people enjoying music concerts.
From the beginning in 2010, just over half of concerts’ attendees were people from 45 to 54 while the participation rate of under 25 people was the same as those from 25 to 44, at 40%. Whereas people who were from 55 to 64 years old had an attendance rate of roughly 25%, the number of people over 75 taking part in music events is much lower which is just 10%.
From 2010 to 2015, under 25 people had become the most crucial passengers of music concerts as their participation rate register the most significant change and reached a peak of 70% in 2015. In contrast, the attendees rate of people from 25 to 44 and 45 to 54 saw decrease trend in some first years, however, recovered in the end of survey period and got 49%, 51%, respectively. A fluctuation trend can be seen in the proportion of people over 75, nevertheless, it reach a top of 20% at the end, in 2015. Opposite with other groups, the participation rate of attendees from 55-64 had downward trend and hit the lowest point of 20% in 2015.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
...ing music concerts was on the increase, with the exception of those from 55 to 64. In addition, it is...
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Line 7, column 275, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'trend' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'trends'.
Suggestion: trends
...from 25 to 44 and 45 to 54 saw decrease trend in some first years, however, recovered...
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Line 7, column 467, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'reaches'?
Suggestion: reaches
...ion of people over 75, nevertheless, it reach a top of 20% at the end, in 2015. Oppos...
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Line 7, column 595, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'trended'.
Suggestion: trended
...te of attendees from 55-64 had downward trend and hit the lowest point of 20% in 2015...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, whereas, while, in addition, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 33.7804878049 178% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1157.0 965.302439024 120% => OK
No of words: 254.0 196.424390244 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55511811024 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64686711261 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 106.607317073 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515748031496 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 325.8 283.868780488 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 28.0625403846 43.030603864 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.555555556 112.824112599 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2222222222 22.9334400587 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.22222222222 5.23603664747 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206332172643 0.215688989381 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112480916202 0.103423049105 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107378204888 0.0843802449381 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186840559817 0.15604864568 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123912628846 0.0819641961636 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.44 61.2550243902 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.