Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged, others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become useful adults.
Discuss both views and give your opinion
A few individual assume that competitive spirit should be inculcated in young people, while others are of the opinion that young ones who are taught cooperation become responsible adult. This essay will discuss both sides of the debate and support instilling spirit of cooperation among children.
First and foremost, those who support a sense of competition amongst children believe that it helps them to imbibe autonomous power to strive beyond all odds. This is because they would desire for excellence and want to remain the best therefore,would strive to do everything within their power to get to the top. For example, I recently interviewed a high school student on the his reason for prefering to study alone, he responded that, he is striving to be the best in his class therefore, would not want to be distracted by other students. This example supports the above assertion.
Furthermore, those who support cooperation among children are of the opinion that it breeds interpersonal relationship between children as they work together to reach a common goal. Further and even more importantly, they feel that it breeds out selfishness from kids as they strive not only for their future success but that of others as well . this is exemplified by a famous doctor who was recently interviewed on national television on why he prefers sharing his knowledge with upcoming medical practitioners, he posited that from infancy he was instructed to work with others as teammate in all areas of life. thus it is apposite the above assertion that cooperation makes youngsters to become responsible adults.
In conclusion, while they are convincing argument on both sides of the debate as to whether to encourage competition or cooperation amongst children, I believe that cooperative attitude should be built up in children for a successful future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1557.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20735785953 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94519382497 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558528428094 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.205946995 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.545454545 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1818181818 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.36363636364 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271284794231 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103522998727 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918195767665 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192309128158 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0877836772697 0.056905535591 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.