One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Some people claim that the best practice of preparing for the adult life is to doing a part time job and that's why the parents should motivate them at that direction. They cite tremendous competition and lack of job opportunities to support their viewpoints. However, I strongly disagree with their opinions and believe that there are many other fruitful options compared to the part-time job opportunity. I will demonstrate my position with three specific reasons throughout the writing.
First, participating in volunteer activities may help the teenagers to ace the difficulties and challenges in adult life hood. For example, blood donation, fund raising for poor etc. may help them to play the active role later in their job life. In fact, there are also many evidences that people who participated in volunteer activities, would become a successful leader too. Volunteer activities help the teenagers to take the right decision at the right time, which is very crucial and important skill to develop. Part-time job, on the other hand, seldom creates novel skills in the teenagers that assist them in future.
Second, parents might focus on learning some extracurricular activities for their teenage children. Extra-curricular activities play a vital role to develop professionalism and maturity which the text book knowledge or part-time job hardly can consolidate. For instances, singing, debating, acting, communication and presentation skill etc. are very much required in the present days and unfortunately part-time jobs rarely focus on these capabilities. Co-curricular activities help the teenagers to broaden the outlook and mind of the children and enrich their adaptation capability which is pivotal to face the hurdles in adult lifetime.
Third, it is also a responsibility of a parent to ensure higher studies of their children instead of focusing on part-time jobs. Nowadays, parents are more prone to make their children money makers rather than make them competent to struggle with the fittest, especially in the developing countries. For example, parents in Bangladesh are often reluctant to encourage their kids to complete their graduation or post-graduation. Instead, they are more willing to send them for some technical low salary part-time jobs which ultimately inhibit the mental growth of the teenagers. As a result, these teenagers often could not survive in hostile lifestyle at adulthood.
To summarize, there is a debate among the people whether the parents should motivate their teenage kids to participate in a part-time job to be familiar with the amenities and obstacles of the adult life. However, in my opinion, I would suggest that parents should try to nurture some other skills and abilities rather than encoring their teenage children to grab the opportunity of being a part-timer.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...paring for the adult life is to doing a part time job and thats why the parents should mo...
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Line 1, column 106, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...lt life is to doing a part time job and thats why the parents should motivate them at...
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Line 3, column 614, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...kills in the teenagers that assist them in future. Second, parents might focus on lear...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, third, for example, for instance, in fact, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 30.3222958057 188% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2398.0 1373.03311258 175% => OK
No of words: 442.0 270.72406181 163% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42533936652 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.04702891845 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99494875828 2.5805825403 116% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 145.348785872 160% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524886877828 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 750.6 419.366225166 179% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 13.0662251656 168% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1573276566 49.2860985944 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 110.228320801 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0909090909 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22727272727 7.06452816374 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 4.33554083885 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.496667740027 0.272083759551 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134941775279 0.0996497079465 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787753844895 0.0662205650399 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27492440224 0.162205337803 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0142625069896 0.0443174109184 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 53.8541721854 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.42419426049 110% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 63.6247240618 203% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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