Currently, many people fail to balance the work with the other parts of lives, what are the reasons and how to solve it?
With the intensive competition in the workforce, it is difficult for employers to reach a work-life balance. This essay will attempt to analyze the reasons and provide possible solutions.
One reason behind this phenomenon is the competitive business environment. With the reform of education, more and more students are able to attend universities and graduate with good qualifications. Consequently, poorly performing employers are likely to be replaced by qualified graduates, which poses a threat on existing employers’ career. In order to secure their jobs, workers have to spend more time on increasing their skill set as well as experiences. This deducts the time and energy they get to spend on their personal life and eventually leads to an imbalanced lifestyle.
The increasing materialism is also attribute to this trend. With advertisement encouraging materialistic requirements, more people acknowledge luxurious products, such as designer bags and sport cars, as a symbol of success. In other to satisfy their cravings for these goods, employer may choose to work overtime for higher salaries. With less personal time, employers may have difficulties in keeping a balance between their career and other aspects of life.
Since the imbalance between work and life can lead to severe social issues, effective measures need to be adopted to tackle this dilemma. Firstly, government can popularize the damages of over-working by offering public lectures and conducting educational advertisements. Once citizens realize that working overtime is detrimental to their mind and bodies, they will take steps to achieve a work-life balance. In addition, companies can improve employers’ well-being by offering paid vocation. In this way, they can enjoy more quality time with their family and place more focus on the other aspects of life.
In conclusion, the fierce competition and material desires are to be blamed for the increasingly imbalanced lifestyles. However, this concern can be addressed by the government and enterprises collectively.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 36, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'attributed'.
Suggestion: attributed
.... The increasing materialism is also attribute to this trend. With advertisement encou...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... focus on the other aspects of life. In conclusion, the fierce competition and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, well, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63461538462 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11332632227 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592948717949 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.6291402623 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.6666666667 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123672007627 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397222802941 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359322605446 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0723848379835 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460887312135 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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