Mobile telephones have brought many benefits but they have also negative effects Do thr disadvantages of having mobile phones outwigh the advantages

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Mobile telephones have brought many benefits but they have also negative effects.Do thr disadvantages of having mobile phones outwigh the advantages?

Technology have brought not only advantages but also disadvantages in our lives. I support the idea that the advantages of technology such as mobile telephones are bigger than the drawback ones.

First of all, the technology have brought many negative effect to people lives. Many people nowdays use their mobile phones for around 2 until 3 hours per day. This kind of habit can cause some serious health problem spesifically for the health of our eyes. The light from the mobile phone screen can damaged the retina in our eyes that can couse blindness.

In the other hand, technology can aslo make our lives way much easier. Firstly, mobile phones can help us to communicate with other people that is in another places. We can contact them by using social media such as Facebook, Gmail, Instagram, and Line and It will only take a few second to contact them.

Secondly, mobile phones can help us to do our daily works. This is something that many people do not realize. For example, back in the 90's people used to sent paper mails to sent their paperworks. But, now people use electronic mails from their phones to send their paperworks. This prove that technology help us a lot in doing our works.

Technology have brought benefit and also negative effect in people lives. Nagative effect such as health damaged is one of the negative effect form technoloy. Meanwhile, technology such as mobile phones can also help us to communicate and to do our daily works.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun second seems to be countable; consider using: 'few seconds'.
Suggestion: few seconds
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, kind of, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1222.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83003952569 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42943177754 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505928853755 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 381.6 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.8276832015 49.4020404114 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.8823529412 106.682146367 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8823529412 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294621438861 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113262624129 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10880506634 0.0667982634062 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194907981071 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111839953445 0.056905535591 197% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.0946893788 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.14 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.58950901804 80% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 78.4519038076 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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