"Several recent surveys indicate that home owners are increasingly eager to conserve energy. At the same time, manufacturers are now marketing many home appliances, such as refrigerators and air conditioners, that are almost twice as energy efficient as those sold a decade ago. Also, new technologies for better home insulation and passive solar heating are readily available to reduce the energy needed for home heating. Therefore, the total demand for electricity in our area will not increase — and may decline slightly. Since our three electric generating plants in operation for the past twenty years have always met our needs, construction of new generating plants will not be necessary."
The author's claim demand a decrease in total electricity demand , as according to several surveys use of efficient appliances can help to decrease the electricity and new generating plants won't necessary. The argument seems genuine at first, however it includes some underlying assumptions which are questionable and can render the argument spurious if disproven .
first of all, the author indicates that owners are increasingly eager to conserve energy based on several surveys ,we cannot quantify the result on several surveys we need to have survey of every state and place of the country and act according depending upon the place and what people want like new york does not have any space for renewable energy except its terraces if they arent occupied but in case of Clemson we have a lot of free space and owners or government can plan to conserve energy , After all the statement seems to be blatantly made without scrutinizing all the places.
Secondly , the author states that manufacturers are marketing may home appliances like refrigerators and air conditioners which are twice efficient as sold a decade back, technology is improving but cost for the technology will also increase everyone cannot replace their refrigerators if they are in good conditions just beacuse environment">environmental issues , everyone cannot afford such new tech so easily, author needs to specify some government policies for use of such devices and statistics of how much money will be saved in coming years , keeping the cost side aside the authors fails to provide the pollution caused for producing new technology devices that those previously manufactured ,he's such trying to do marketing of those devices. so the author should provide the statistics of price of new technology and its return on investment compared to previous one and the energy required to manufacture the new component compared the old ones .
Going on , new technologies for better home insulation and passive solar heating are readily available to reduce the energy needed for home heating, so the maths done by author might be true but author fails to consider the environment in which the solar panels will produce the electricity and in what environment do we need electricity . we need to heat our house during winters, when the solar panels won't be working in those snowy conditions thus we are dependent on grid electricity , thus during winters in total the electricity might remain constant or might increase depending on conditions but it won't decline.
The author has assumed the entire scenario in very positive manner without considering whole district or state or country without scrutinizing any of the parameters in different situations , the final statement of author for no need for new generation plants is flawed conclusion and need to consider the increasing need for energy with increasing population and technology.
The above assumptions undermine the authors argument brought up in the memo, had the author considered better alternatives to the issue and explicitly surveyed all areasand considered all environment">environmental conditions the argument could have been infacible
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- In an attempt to improve highway safety Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways But this effort has failed the number of accidents has not decreased and based on reports by the highway patrol man 58
- Several recent surveys indicate that home owners are increasingly eager to conserve energy At the same time manufacturers are now marketing many home appliances such as refrigerators and air conditioners that are almost twice as energy efficient as those 58
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2
No. of Sentences: 15
No. of Words: 350
No. of Characters: 1500
No. of Different Words: 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: ,
...d a decrease in total electricity demand , as according to several surveys use of ...
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Line 1, column 363, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: .
...ender the argument spurious if disproven . first of all, the author indicates ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...the argument spurious if disproven . first of all, the author indicates that owne...
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Line 3, column 35, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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...conserve energy based on several surveys ,we cannot quantify the result on severa...
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...onserve energy based on several surveys ,we cannot quantify the result on several...
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Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'surveyed'.
Suggestion: surveyed
...sult on several surveys we need to have survey of every state and place of the countr...
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Line 3, column 192, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...everal surveys we need to have survey of every state and place of the country and...
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Line 3, column 277, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...t according depending upon the place and what people want like new york does not ...
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Line 3, column 383, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
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...able energy except its terraces if they arent occupied but in case of Clemson we have...
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Line 3, column 501, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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...r government can plan to conserve energy , After all the statement seems to be bla...
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...de without scrutinizing all the places. Secondly , the author states that manufa...
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...rutinizing all the places. Secondly , the author states that manufacturers ar...
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...e environment'>environmental issues , everyone cannot afford such new tech so...
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...much money will be saved in coming years , keeping the cost side aside the authors...
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...vices that those previously manufactured ,hes such trying to do marketing of those...
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Line 5, column 709, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: he's
...ces that those previously manufactured ,hes such trying to do marketing of those de...
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Line 5, column 759, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...rying to do marketing of those devices. so the author should provide the statistic...
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Line 5, column 962, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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... the new component compared the old ones . Going on , new technologies for bet...
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...ent compared the old ones . Going on , new technologies for better home insula...
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Line 7, column 338, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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... what environment do we need electricity . we need to heat our house during winter...
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...at environment do we need electricity . we need to heat our house during winters, ...
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...hus we are dependent on grid electricity , thus during winters in total the electr...
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...f the parameters in different situations , the final statement of author for no ne...
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Line 11, column 37, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... The above assumptions undermine the authors argument brought up in the memo, had th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, after all, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2695.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 500.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30176714462 2.78398813304 119% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 204.123752495 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 866.7 705.55239521 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 55.0 22.8473053892 241% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 186.726048756 57.8364921388 323% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 299.444444444 119.503703932 251% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 55.5555555556 23.324526521 238% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 5.70786347227 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.25449101796 476% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207048093469 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746609037926 0.0743258471296 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591310287126 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.092431413397 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628057461808 0.0628817314937 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.7 14.3799401198 220% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 7.19 48.3550499002 15% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.9 12.197005988 212% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.87 12.5979740519 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.19 8.32208582834 122% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 24.0 11.1389221557 215% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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