An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The arguments presented in the given passage are flawed for three fundamental reasons.
Firstly, there is no comparison of new breed of millet, which is high in vitamin A, with the existing breed of millet. The passage does not demonstrate practical/laboratory results to prove the same. A survey on the same would make this more clear.
Secondly, there are no discussions on the side effects of increasing vitamin A. While it is understood from the passage that Tagus is a impoverished nation, the organization should take into the account of the side effects that may have negative impact and should discuss the remedy for the same.
Thirdly, there is no clear cut study on other possible staple diets/foods that people of Tagus take in their daily routine, which is not only staple but also rich in vitamin A. The passage does not present any study on the same. If there exists another alternate staple diet which is not only rich in vitamin A, but also cheap inn terms of farming, then there is no necessity to go for costly breed of millet that is rich in vitamin A. Though, the passage mentions that the farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet, it does not not address the cost of these millet in market. If prices are high to purchase these millet, this will seriously affect the people of Tagus, who are already impoverished.
If all three questions are answered, then it is reasonable to push the government of Tagus to promote this new type of millet. Otherwise, it seem to be a vague method without any justifiable reasons.
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- People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers 50
- An international development organization in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A While seeds for this new type of millet cost more farmers will be paid 50
- People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers 50
- Although sound moral judgment is an important characteristic of an effective leader it is not as important as a leader s ability to maintain the respect of his or her peers 50
- Although sound moral judgment is an important characteristic of an effective leader it is not as important as a leader s ability to maintain the respect of his or her peers 50
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...derstood from the passage that Tagus is a impoverished nation, the organization s...
^
Line 7, column 553, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: not
...ming the new variety of millet, it does not not address the cost of these millet in mar...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 581, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this millet' or 'these millets'?
Suggestion: this millet; these millets
...et, it does not not address the cost of these millet in market. If prices are high to purcha...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 636, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this millet' or 'these millets'?
Suggestion: this millet; these millets
... market. If prices are high to purchase these millet, this will seriously affect the people ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...Tagus, who are already impoverished. If all three questions are answered, then ...
^^
Line 9, column 142, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'seems'?
Suggestion: seems
... this new type of millet. Otherwise, it seem to be a vague method without any justif...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1303.0 2260.96107784 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 273.0 441.139720559 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77289377289 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6393155163 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505494505495 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 705.55239521 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5428554159 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.230769231 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373410932338 0.218282227539 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114967904965 0.0743258471296 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0966229332595 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16807332197 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0915686163964 0.0628817314937 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...derstood from the passage that Tagus is a impoverished nation, the organization s...
^
Line 7, column 553, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: not
...ming the new variety of millet, it does not not address the cost of these millet in mar...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 581, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this millet' or 'these millets'?
Suggestion: this millet; these millets
...et, it does not not address the cost of these millet in market. If prices are high to purcha...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 636, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this millet' or 'these millets'?
Suggestion: this millet; these millets
... market. If prices are high to purchase these millet, this will seriously affect the people ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...Tagus, who are already impoverished. If all three questions are answered, then ...
^^
Line 9, column 142, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'seems'?
Suggestion: seems
... this new type of millet. Otherwise, it seem to be a vague method without any justif...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1303.0 2260.96107784 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 273.0 441.139720559 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77289377289 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6393155163 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505494505495 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 705.55239521 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5428554159 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.230769231 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373410932338 0.218282227539 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114967904965 0.0743258471296 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0966229332595 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16807332197 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0915686163964 0.0628817314937 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.