the luxuries and inconveniences of contemporary lives prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
luxury defines opulence and opulence is what attract people as Comfortable life is what most people desire in their fatigue life. One might argue that luxury is needed to make life less convoluted but in my opinion it make people dependent on others as it becomes an impediment in ones growth.
as a matter of fact, luxury can be afforded by rich people who like to squander money on work they are lazy to do. Take for example, a princess who was grown amid all servants to help her with her quotidian chores like dressing, hairstyling and even bathing. Image a time when she is forced to do all the chores by herself in case her servants are absent , it will be complete debacle. She wouldnt know how to dress or clean her shoes as she was never introduced to do them. the person to blame here is not only her but also her parents who never encouraged her to her chores independently. Hence luxury make you feel incomplete if its taken away.
luxury is an addiction, once you have it you can believe you can not live without them. It can not be denied that luxury is solution to a busy life. It is the result of hard work and sedulous efforts hence people have a choice to spend on lavish and extravagant accommodities. it makes you a liability and hinders self development. In this modern age people desire to make their lives simpler to escape from dealing with difficulties. however it is the difficulties that perpetuates growth mentally and physically.
in conclusion, it can be explicitly stated that luxury can impede natural self development. However it depends on the person who has luxurious live to enjoy the opulence but at the same like learn the importance of being independent and do their work themselves.
- The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner Over the past two years the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically Many Central Pl 75
- private schools offer children opportunities that public schools do not and all the parents who can afford to send their children to private school should do so 50
- the luxuries and inconveniences of contemporary lives prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals 50
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, for example, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1429.0 2235.4752809 64% => OK
No of words: 306.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66993464052 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63125656765 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552287581699 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 704.065955056 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9311823447 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.3125 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13135084709 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446252283358 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409047088767 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.088999435709 0.150359130593 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333176528449 0.0667264976115 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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