The percentage of overweight student in western society has increase by 20% in the last ten year
discussing cause and effect in the distrubing trends.
Having lack of physical activity contributes to the obesity problem for kids in Western communities, increasing of around 20% in a decade. This problem results in unhealthy children.
Increasing number of obesity children is because most children have lack of physical activity. This is to say almost all children avoid doing exercise due to having no time and interest, while they prefer to have sedentary activities, leading to risk of unhealthy life. For example, overweight Canadian children aged 5-17 were reported in 2019 accounted for 69%, and this was caused by playing a game and reading a book with sitting almost 15 hours a day, and they did not involve in any sport, while rarely eating vegetable. Therefore, children with inconsistent activities result in them losing concentration on school.
Consuming more and more high-fat foods lead to being unhealthy. That is to say the food eaten by kids conceive poor nutrition, causing harmfull for body and do not fulfill body needs. Therefore, the rise of illness related on over consuming of unhealthy meals interupt school activity, resulting in decreasing academic performance. For example, American children eating burger in school are accounted for around 20% in 2018, and they get hypertension related on such a food, and the food consisted of 50 g of fat saturated and carbohydrate, suffering illness and dropping academic record due to less nutrient, and in fact children need vitamin and protein to have more energy.
To conclude, less than a half of kids in western areas rise due to less of intensify sport activity leading to obesity children in decade. Therefore, children are dealing with risk illness. Where possible, campaining and encouraging healthy lifestyle is must for children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, therefore, while, for example, in fact, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27304964539 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79876209459 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563829787234 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.7924201867 49.4020404114 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.384615385 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84615384615 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0563552456832 0.244688304435 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0214090031416 0.084324248473 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0310331842233 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0439161894166 0.151304729494 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280393816593 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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