The idea that citizens nowadays are drinking a vast amount of sugary beverages. There are a number of reasons for this tendency, and some measures can be taken to combat this problem.
There is one primary reason why people are absorbing more sugary drinks. This can be attributed to a marketing campaign for various companies which is targeted at teenagers and youngsters. This is simply because the more the youth consumes, the more money they contribute to the profit of firms. One example of this marketing is that when people come to a certain restaurant, they will be likely to choose a combo of sugary drinks and main dishes rather than solitary main dishes. The reason is that the price of the combo option is slightly cheaper than the main ones.
However, the government can tackle this phenomenon by two effective solutions. The first approach is that national and local authorities should put high taxes on soft drinks. As a result, sweet drink consumption will fall significantly due to the expensive cost of sweet beverages.
Secondly, by increasing the young generation's awareness about health, they will have a profound insight into ways that keep fit. When understanding that intake of a large number of sugary drinks could lead to numerous diseases including cardiovascular diseases, diabetes, and obesity, the youth would try to avoid those beverages.
In conclusion, the principal reason for consuming too many soft drinks is the advertisement of corporations, various steps could be taken to alleviate this issue.
The idea that citizens nowadays are drinking a vast amount of sugary beverages. There are a number of reasons for this tendency, and some measures can be taken to combat this problem.
There is one primary reason why people are absorbing more sugary drinks. This can be attributed to a marketing campaign for various companies which is targeted at teenagers and youngsters. This is simply because the more the youth consumes, the more money they contribute to the profit of firms. One example of this marketing is that when people come to a certain restaurant, they will be likely to choose a combo of sugary drinks and main dishes rather than solitary main dishes. The reason is that the price of the combo option is slightly cheaper than the main ones.
However, the government can tackle this phenomenon by two effective solutions. The first approach is that national and local authorities should put high taxes on soft drinks. As a result, sweet drink consumption will fall significantly due to the expensive cost of sweet beverages.
Secondly, by increasing the young generation's awareness about health, they will have a profound insight into ways that keep fit. When understanding that intake of a large number of sugary drinks could lead to numerous diseases including cardiovascular diseases, diabetes, and obesity, the youth would try to avoid those beverages.
In conclusion, the principal reason for consuming too many soft drinks is the advertisement of corporations, various steps could be taken to alleviate this issue.
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- It is said that the majority of television programmes had better concentrate on educating the young generation about the essence of social aspects While I partly agree with this idea other issues such as advertisement or entertainment cannot be overlooked 89
- The table illustrates how much money was donated to developing countries in the period 2006 2010 by US and EU charities to support technological development Overall it is clear that total aid increased during this period US aid was considerably higher tha 56
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- Government should make laws about people s nutrition and food choice Other argue that is their choice Discuss both views and give your opinion 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1294.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.176 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78021581896 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6589006702 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5384615385 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2307692308 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.498818420329 0.244688304435 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164105421317 0.084324248473 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.151324204175 0.0667982634062 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273718144576 0.151304729494 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.230432926765 0.056905535591 405% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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