Many People now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. why people do risk their lives in this way ,and do you think is a good trend ?
Nowadays, the craze for adventure sports/activities is increasing dramatically. Extreme activities like hang-gliding, mountain climbing are gaining popularity among people. I believe that involvement in this kind of activity is is riskier but adventurous and gives the opportunity to experience the thrill. Further paragraphs will be dedicated to the details of this view and a balanced approach will be discussed.
On the first hand, activities like hang-gliding, mountain climbing, or sky-diving have a high fatality rate. In recent past years, there are innumerable incidences where people lost their lives during this kind of extreme activity. However, the main reasons for those accidents were a lack of safety measures and untrained crew members. The risk rate is very high if the safety measures are not followed strictly. A recent accident in Rishikesh could be considered an example where two people lost their lives during Para-gliding as they fell down from a height of 900 meters because the safety belt broke suddenly. These types of accidents could be avoided if safety inspections are done properly.
On the other hand, adventure activities are the best way to thrill yourself. Tourists are more attracted to destinations where this kind of activity is conducted more. According to a survey, most people experience an adrenaline rush that amazes them while performing activities like sky-diving, hang-gliding, or mountain trekking. Many think these type of activities allows them to overcome their fear of height or fear of water. These innovative activities have introduced in the tourism industry as well. For example, most of the tour packages for hill stations in India are based on trekking and camping where they provide all the required gear and gadgets to visitors.
To summarise, I believe that extreme activities are life-threatening without proper safety measures but they are good and useful solutions for people to deal with stress and experience thrill.
- Many People now undertake extreme activities from hang gliding to mountain climbing why people do risk their lives in this way and do you think is a good trend 67
- You should spend about 40 minutes on this task The Internet is now used all around the world as a source of information and communication However it s often controversial so many people think it needs to be controlled Others believe there should be no int 73
- The charts show what Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 78
- Some people think that the best way to get the news is through newspapers while others think it is through online media Discuss both views and give your own opinion 87
- Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport while other people think that mental strength is more important Discuss both views and give your own opinion 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: is
...at involvement in this kind of activity is is riskier but adventurous and gives the o...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 308, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...e opportunity to experience the thrill. Further paragraphs will be dedicated to the det...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 507, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...roduced in the tourism industry as well. For example, most of the tour packages f...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, well, while, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1699.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.62582781457 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22000246257 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579470198675 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3947349801 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.1875 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.875 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245231368299 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752106916635 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543379237443 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140352080986 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0173257172011 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.