Nowadays, it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated is amusement parks for the purpose of peoples’ recreation.
Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Explain your reasons and support them with specific examples.
There is not even an iota of doubt that global warming has led to a near extinction of quite a few aquatic species from planet earth. Many a places around the world has themed parks reserved for marine life, where they are provided shelter; however, they are also used as a muse for humans. Although, shifting fauna of the sea from their natural biome into closed spaces might have certain benefits such as repopulation of endangered species and absence of scouting for food, it does not go without saying, that there are also certain drawbacks to it.
To initiate with the benefits of relocation of ocean creatures. First and foremost, movement of fishes such as dolphins and alligators has spared them from being devoured by their predators. To be precise, these endangered species are a part of the food chain and their existence is of great value. In other words, repopulation of these species had better be done because if any link in the food chain is missing, it will lead to a catastrophe. For example, according to a journal published by Wildlife Authorities of India, in 1992, should they not have moved the Long-nose Alligators from the jungle to a fish sanctuary, it would have been extinct by now. Second to this is the fact that these creatures do not need to search for food as they are fed in a timely manner if they are in the care of humans. Hence, it would not harm the fishes if they were relocated and used as an amusement for humans, unless they are not at risk.
While these marine animals are moved from their natural habitat into man-made containment zones, there could be some issues with it. Primarily, relocation of these creatures if done in their early life would hamper their social behavior. To explain this, fishes when separated from their herd find it difficult to develop natural instinct which they would if they had stayed with their parents. Take dolphins for instance, a survey showed that dolphins who grew in the sea naturally knew how to use their nose to sift sand for food whereas their counterparts did not. However it is important to preserve the natural surroundings of these fishes and preserve them from dying, but only so much can be accomplished.
To reiterate, although relocation of the aquatic fauna can be mentally challenging for them, this had better be done to save them from extinction eventually and as for human entertainment, it should not be much of a trouble, should these fishes be treated properly.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 140, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a place' or simply 'places'?
Suggestion: a place; places
...aquatic species from planet earth. Many a places around the world has themed parks reser...
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Line 3, column 754, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a timely manner" with adverb for "timely"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...need to search for food as they are fed in a timely manner if they are in the care of humans. Henc...
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Line 5, column 570, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ood whereas their counterparts did not. However it is important to preserve the natural...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, whereas, while, as for, for example, for instance, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 428.0 315.596192385 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77803738318 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54181876813 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511682242991 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 636.3 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.8717996001 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.8125 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.75 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231546266134 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795552335411 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344988089958 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142420193947 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0429805870562 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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