Some parents do not want their children to work part time while in school so that they can concentrate on their studies. Other parents believe their kids should learn to manage study and work duties as this teaches them certain skills they cannot learn at school and therefore better prepares them for the real world. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both views.
Working while studying has become more popular among youngsters. Some parents want their children to do so because it trains them to live a better life by teaching them life skills, which cannot definitely be obtained from classroom. Some parents, on the other hand, prefer their offspring to focus only on studies to achieve academic goals. Both view-points have merits and drawbacks as this essay will demonstrate.
Being able to work part time while schooling certainly offers number of skills, which will be vital for them to live a balanced life. As students, they should do their assignments and tutorials while they should be present at work on time, thereby accountability and time management skills will surely begin to develop. Not only will those skills grow, but autonomy, critical thinking and independent problem solving will also be obtained by youths. In addition to those capabilities, they are able to make some money whereby academic expenses can be covered, so children have a chance to be responsible for their education. However were they to make wrong choices, money handling can lead to serious problems, such as drug addiction and cyber-crimes. Making things worse is that children have already lost their focus as they want rather to make money than to carryout studies.
Having said that, primary reason for high grades and good progress reports is to concentrate on classroom work. These students have plenty of time to complete their homework and tutes, which , in turn, reinforces what they learn at school. As a result, it is easier for them to achieve their academic grades. This is supported by a recent study conducted at Colombo university, in which they claim that grades of focused students are always higher than part time employees. Focusing only on studies, however, negatively affects kids in their adulthood; when they enter in to the workforce they may experience many difficulties as they have not been trained in a way that necessary skills, such as team playing, considering alternative view points and time management, are developed. Not only may they fail to maintain work life balance, but other relationships including social, professional and romantic, may not be successful.
To conclude, being a part time employee benefits a student for the rest of his or her life; however, it could interfere with their learning strength, and even students can be misled by money they make.
- Some parents do not want their children to work part time while in school so that they can concentrate on their studies Other parents believe their kids should learn to manage study and work duties as this teaches them certain skills they cannot learn at 84
- Some parents do not want their children to work part time while in school so that they can concentrate on their studies Other parents believe their kids should learn to manage study and work duties as this teaches them certain skills they cannot learn at 84
- In some countries secondary schools aim to provide a general education across a range of subjects In others children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career Which of these two systems is more appropriate in today s world 78
- Some parents do not want their children to work part time while in school so that they can concentrate on their studies Other parents believe their kids should learn to manage study and work duties as this teaches them certain skills they cannot learn at 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: part-time
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Suggestion: However,
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...complete their homework and tutes, which , in turn, reinforces what they learn at ...
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Suggestion: part-time
...focused students are always higher than part time employees. Focusing only on studies, ho...
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Suggestion:
...kids in their adulthood; when they enter in to the workforce they may experience ...
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Suggestion: part-time
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, while, in addition, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2046.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 396.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16666666667 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68304652414 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573232323232 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7597986297 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.352941176 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2941176471 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.435720774656 0.244688304435 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131627541622 0.084324248473 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723844468371 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255251960785 0.151304729494 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645369782215 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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