Some people believe that a person’s intelligence is inherited from the parents,
while others believe that their environment is the main factor. Discuss these
views. Which factor do you think is mostly responsible for intelligence.
some people is of the opinion that an individual's intelligence is inherited from the parents, while others think that the environmental cause essentially impacts one's cleverness. Both aspects are significant to build up a strong brainpower throughout a person's lifespan. I will discuss these perspectives in this essay as follows.
on the one hand, it is undeniable that children's iq level is genetic from their mom and/or dad. specifically, the parents who work as white collars such as scientists, doctors. entrepreneurs or businessmen (businesswomen) as they need to always use their logics and intelligence in their job, may have smart sons and daughters who also talented in biological or economics field. The trump family is an ideal example to prove that children's smartness is largely affected by their parents. as we can see, trump is a clever president/businessmen and father who has very clever kids working at different fields and supporting him.
on the other hand, there is a fact that a person's smartness can be advanced by some external factors.
for instance, during the pregnancy period, if the mother usually reads books out loud, listens to musics or podcasts, it will allow the baby to receive those information at a very early age, thus, they are able to improve their conscious and thinking. when the baby grows up, their mom and dad will get them to schools to learn about new things, gain more knowledge, hence, increase their aptitude more wisely. in addition, nutritious veggies such as pumpkins, carrots or proteins such as fish are another crucial factor supporting one's brain development.
as can be seen, a child's cleverness is inherited from parents is fortunate as their iq is originally high. however, if these smart kids do not practice their logical thinkings and memorization by other environmental factors such as selective foods consumption, learning at schools, doing maths and speaking another language, they are not able to remain their intelligence in a long-term.
in conclusion, one's intelligence could be parental inheritability and external involvement, people should support and develop their intellectual capacity by keeping a constant brain practice through their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, may, so, thus, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1871.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31534090909 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07575742998 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613636363636 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2260143366 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.733333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4666666667 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 24.0 5.01903807615 478% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255874579642 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078243266298 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645532428833 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136697795925 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677069828496 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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