After leaving school or university young people should choose a job or career that they love rather than one that pays the best salary To what extent do you agree with this statement

Essay topics:

After leaving school or university, young people should choose a job or career that they love, rather than one that pays the best salary.

To what extent do you agree with this statement?

It is said that youngsters would not select an occupation or a job that they are not excited in. Personal, i completely agree with this view because young people should choose a job that they prefer.
First of all, do the job we love will increase our creativity and make efectively. When we decide to do a job we enjoy , it means that we have enough courage to make our dreams come true. Although we will face to some difficulties sometimes, the creativity and the perseverance will make the success.
Afterwards, do the favorite job not only getting success, but also earnig income. Inspite of choosing a high-paying job will help us financially stable, but if we try to effort with the job we are passionate about, we can also make frofit from it. According to the singers, dancers, beatboxers, ect, we can see the passion they have and the constantly effort they try are help them become well-known. That make them receive high salary.
In conclusion, i agree with the viewpoint that youngsters should choose a job or career that they love because it brings more benefits for them rather than a job with high salary.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, well, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 15.0 41.998997996 36% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 926.0 1615.20841683 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 197.0 315.596192385 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70050761421 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 4.20363070211 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62587409713 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 176.041082164 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568527918782 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 287.1 506.74238477 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3444071187 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237867947218 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103272891553 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108070170581 0.0667982634062 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181471576946 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104083669358 0.056905535591 183% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 78.4519038076 50% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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