During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
Dear sir,
I am writing this letter to remind you of our meeting on a flight that you were boarding from Delhi to Mumbai. I was sitting next to you. While exchanging thoughts on a general topic, you mentioned that you were looking for a senior manager for the management of your chain of restaurants. I would like to supply my services for this post.
I have completed my master's in business administration from Punjab university in the year 2010. After that, I joined a local company as an assistant manager. After gaining experience of 3 years I applied for the post of manager in a prestigious 5-star hotel in our town and I worked there for almost 7 years. Now, I find myself appropriate for the post of a senior manager in your restaurant therefore I am attaching my curriculum vitae with this letter.
Moreover, I am an exceptional speaker and event manager. I organized and managed many national and international conferences in my previous workplace. I can handle any difficult situation because of my calm and positive attitude. I have mastered the skills of managing people. Therefore, I think I will stand out at your set standards.
I would be grateful to you if you consider me for this post. I look forward to hearing you soon
yours sincerely,
KIRAN
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ke to supply my services for this post I have completed my masters in business ...
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...ing my curriculum vitae with this letter Moreover I am an exceptional speaker and...
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...k I will stand out at your set standards I would be grateful to you if you consid...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, moreover, so, therefore, while, i think, mind you
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 32.9175257732 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1028.0 937.175257732 110% => OK
No of words: 222.0 206.0 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63063063063 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79816397188 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59009009009 0.622605031667 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 331.2 290.88556701 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 12.6804123711 8% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 222.0 16.3608247423 1357% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 44.8134815571 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1028.0 76.5299724578 1343% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 222.0 16.8248392259 1319% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 59.0 4.34317383033 1358% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144662286805 0.216113520407 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144662286805 0.0766984524023 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0603063233224 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109533910998 0.12726935374 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100481849278 0.0580467560999 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 111.4 8.37731958763 1330% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -145.39 70.7449484536 -206% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 3.82989690722 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 88.7 7.45979381443 1189% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.05 8.71597938144 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 18.42 7.59969072165 242% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 53.0 41.2886597938 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 8.62886597938 626% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 90.8 8.54432989691 1063% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 91.0 8.15463917526 1116% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.