Parent should pay attention for their kids and take care of them. They have to spend enough time with their children and build a strong relationship between them. Some parent prefer spend that time by playing game or sport other use the time doing together schoolwork, in my perspective, I believe, parent should have fun time with their kids by playing video games or any hobby which is their kids prefer. I think that for a couple reasons which will be elaborated on in the following essay to explain my point of view.
First, and foremost, playing with kids will strong confidence between the parent and their children, because they will be very close to them and encourage the kids to speak with their mom and dad comfortablely without any fear or shyness, by doing so the parent will figure out any concern or difficulty that their kids might face and they can give them a suitable advice, take a compelling example from my real live, I usually spend amazing time with my daughter especially in the weekend by watching movie or go with her outside to play in playground and used to talk with her about my daily work or ask her to help me in choose my cloths and take her opinion in everything, therefore, she always share with me her concern and can ask my for advice in anything and any situation which she put on. As we can see the importance of spending a beautiful between kids and their parent in strengthen the relationship between them.
In addition, admittedly, some parent believes that when they have time, they should spend it by help their kids with school work, since this will help them to understand the subjectsand improve vtheirv academic performance, but, to me I think, we have to do this duity every day despite of having free time or not, in the other hand, we spend free time in doing sport or plying game to let our kids to relax from long week days school work with many assignment and projects, hence they need adeqeut time to release their tiredness to be able to return back to school after weekend with positive energy.
To sum up, have fun playing games with our kids is as persuasive as it stands, based on the exposition that mentioned above how this help to strengthen the relationship between them, moreover, this will relax kids and release their tiredness.
Parent should pay attention for their kids and take care of them. They have to spend enough time with their children and build a strong relationship between them. Some parent prefer spend that time by playing game or sport other use the time doing together schoolwork, in my perspective, I believe, parent should have fun time with their kids by playing video games or any hobby which is their kids prefer. I think that for a couple reasons which will be elaborated on in the following essay to explain my point of view.
First, and foremost, playing with kids will strong confidence between the parent and their children, because they will be very close to them and encourage the kids to speak with their mom and dad comfortablely without any fear or shyness, by doing so the parent will figure out any concern or difficulty that their kids might face and they can give them a suitable advice, take a compelling example from my real live, I usually spend amazing time with my daughter especially in the weekend by watching movie or go with her outside to play in playground and used to talk with her about my daily work or ask her to help me in choose my cloths and take her opinion in everything, therefore, she always share with me her concern and can ask my for advice in anything and any situation which she put on. As we can see the importance of spending a beautiful between kids and their parent in strengthen the relationship between them.
In addition, admittedly, some parent believes that when they have time, they should spend it by help their kids with school work, since this will help them to understand the subjectsand improve vtheirv academic performance, but, to me I think, we have to do this duity every day despite of having free time or not, in the other hand, we spend free time in doing sport or plying game to let our kids to relax from long week days school work with many assignment and projects, hence they need adeqeut time to release their tiredness to be able to return back to school after weekend with positive energy.
To sum up, have fun playing games with our kids is as persuasive as it stands, based on the exposition that mentioned above how this help to strengthen the relationship between them, moreover, this will relax kids and release their tiredness.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Parent should pay attention for their ki...
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Suggestion:
...ing essay to explain my point of view. First, and foremost, playing with kids w...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'shares'.
Suggestion: shares
...on in everything, therefore, she always share with me her concern and can ask my for ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...engthen the relationship between them. In addition, admittedly, some parent bel...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assignment seems to be countable; consider using: 'many assignments'.
Suggestion: many assignments
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Suggestion: return
...o release their tiredness to be able to return back to school after weekend with positive e...
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Suggestion:
...l after weekend with positive energy. To sum up, have fun playing games with o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, i think, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62836185819 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40994694671 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479217603912 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6003584229 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 20.1344086022 253% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 251.479497176 48.9658058833 514% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 236.625 100.406767564 236% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.125 20.6045352989 248% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 10.625 5.45110844103 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.617988975642 0.236089414692 262% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.340783716558 0.076458572812 446% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.184745827221 0.0737576698707 250% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.405996179383 0.150856017488 269% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.222847962413 0.0645574589148 345% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.9 11.7677419355 220% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.8 10.1575268817 205% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.4 10.0537634409 223% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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