Some people think that schools should reward only students with the best academic results, while others believe it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In today’s society, a school of thought holds that solely schoolers who excel in their studying can receive rewards, while others claim that it is more essential for schools to give awards to individuals who make progress. Both viewpoints are reasonable, but I lean towards the latter idea.
On the one hand, there are a number of rationales for advocating rewarding for the elite students only. First and foremost, attaining high scores requires sustainable attempts during the whole study process, so these pupils are more deserving of the praise and prizes compared to those with fewer achievements. There is no denying that privileges motivate them to be more diligent, which can maintain a sense of competitiveness in the school. For instance, the top student needs to make an effort to hold the first place, while the lower ones must strive to rank up.
On the other hand, I reckon that not only outstanding students but also those who aspire to better performance should be given rewards. This would instill a sense of achievement into these pupils, which incentivize them to keep endeavoring to get higher scores. For example, according to a survey conducted by The University of Mumbai, 89% of non-achievers become interested in their studies because of the faith shown by their teachers and school. Hence proved that giving academic prizes when individuals make strides in studying is the optimal way to inspire and motivate them to study harder.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the benefits of also handing out awards for those who show signs of improvement would outweigh rewarding only elite students.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ith shown by their teachers and school. Hence proved that giving academic prizes when...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, so, still, while, for example, for instance, i reckon, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1363.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08582089552 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7359958539 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.619402985075 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7438071178 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.909090909 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3636363636 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1818181818 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219298395672 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745004162136 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551083851097 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133048223858 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238845496254 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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