Many children nowadays are spending more and more time inside rather than outside. Is this a positive or negative trend? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your knowledge or experience.
In recent years, more and more kids prefer doing indoor activities instead of going outside. In my point of view, this condition is a negative development which could generate low physical abilities, detrimental effects on health and isolation.
First of all, the most serious problem that could be witnessed by children who spend too much time at home is that low psychomotor abilities. It is mentioned most of the experts that young age is the golden time for individuals to start improving their physical skills.For instance, parents can encourage their children playing at the park so they can do more movements instead of playing at home in which usually has limited space. Thus, indoor-playing will limit children’s opportunities to move more than their regular activities.
Secondly, health problems, particularly bone-and-eyes related illness, is a potential effect of staying at home most of the time. Usually, children would have more access to online games and watching TV if they were let to stay at home. As a result, radiation from the screen brought negative effects on their eyes. Research conducted by the opthamologists association in Indonesia explained that the number of people under 12 years old wearing glasses increased by 20% in 2020. Furthermore, parents traditionally went outside for a walk with their kids in the morning to get Vitamin D because sunlight at that particular time is rich in Vitamin D. This vitamin is very beneficial for bone’s strength especially for young age. Therefore, children not going outside very often, especially in the morning, will probably suffer from Vitamin D deficiency.
Finally, it is imperative also to build children’s soft skills in socializing with others. However, by doing most of activities indoor, children would have less chance to meet new people. Therefore, it could lead to isolation.
In conclusion, it is essential for children to spend more time outside to avoid low psychomotor ability, health problems (particularly on eyes and bones) and isolation. Hence, performing most of activities indoor is undeniably a negative trend for children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1800.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35714285714 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95693772772 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577380952381 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3675177806 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.882352941 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7647058824 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.70588235294 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21311619415 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703714216127 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465474167427 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126837398614 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601680358433 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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