"Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Today's youth is tommorrow's future, and the vision and goals our generation lives by pave the way for what the world will look like in the next few decades. It is imperative, then, that this youth be guided in the right direction lest they stray too far from the ideals of humankind. With their easily impressionable minds, young people are often distracted to the allure of immediate fame. However, I strongly feel that they should instead be motivated to achieve long term, realistic goals instead, the reasons for which I shall state below.
First of all, immediate fame is ephemeral. It fades with time, as all things do. Today, social media is rife with dozens of influencers and reel creators that attracts the youth to digress and spend their time following the footsteps of those celebrities. However, not only do these celebrities often dissappear overnight after scandals and fights with their contemporaries, they also waste the time of the hundreds, if not thousands of young people trying to emulate them with their fads and trends. It is of utmost importance that this generation understand that this kind of fame is short lived - once one celebrity is no longer looked up to, another takes their place. Hence, spending time in the pursuit of trying to become like them is dangerous, because that kind of immediate fame never really leaves a mark on the world.
Additionally, pursuing practical, ideal goals that you work on over time is much likely to bear fruit. One can only look at the great sports players, doctors and piano virtuosos today to imagine how much time they spent honing their skills over the years. All these people began to develop and expand their goals from their youth - preferring to spend days studying, reading and staying awake at night while their peers most likely squandered their valuable time in idle activities. For instance, many celebrated astrononauts spent their formative years pursuing their goal, undergoing hours of rigorous training, and working tirelessly every single day to inch close and closer to their coveted, elusive goal of going to space. Surgeons spend years honing their craft. The culmination of their efforts is quite visible, and it speaks for itself. Diligence and tenacity are the keys to success. Achieving such impossible feats takes decades to learn and master. However, it may be too late by the time some people realise it. Hence, time management is a crucial lesson for the youth to learn, but it will most definately help them to one day succeed in becoming the individuals they look up to.
However, I do agree that it is true that young people are quite easily influenced by the pressure of their peers - to try to gain immediate fame to impress their friends, and go along with the flow. However, this line of thinking is quite deleterious. I concede that it is indeed hard to make some young people understand the signficance of not running the race for short term attention, but instead to focus on the larger goal. It is our duty to educate and motivate this youth to understand the necessity of working on the larger picture. Coupled with encouragement from their mentors and a healthy understanding of the benefits, I truly do believe that we can shape the youth to become respectable citizens of tomorrow.
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- Young people should be encouraged to pursue long term realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition 66
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, really, so, then, while, for instance, kind of, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2743.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 557.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92459605027 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55667830477 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 298.0 215.323595506 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535008976661 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 834.3 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1254270941 60.3974514979 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.72 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.28 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170600792241 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049327958202 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569969797903 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121999709703 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581762867139 0.0667264976115 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, really, so, then, while, for instance, kind of, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2743.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 557.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92459605027 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55667830477 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 298.0 215.323595506 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535008976661 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 834.3 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1254270941 60.3974514979 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.72 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.28 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170600792241 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049327958202 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569969797903 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121999709703 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581762867139 0.0667264976115 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.