The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The statement mentions that luxuries life can prevent individuals to be independent. But I do not agree with the prompt. People can grow up in a very rich families and still be strong because it depends on a person characteristic not just money.
First of all, being rich does not mean that people cannot be strong. Imagine a girl who grow up in a rich family with all expensive clothes and shoes and she goes to a very expensive private school. It does not mean that she is not going to get good grades in school. It exactly can be an opposite. She can even have much more high school knowledges compare to a student who goes to a public school.
In addition, conveniences can make every body's life even better and faster. Consider a mother and wife who lives in a big and expensive house with a perfect kitchen and lots of kitchen staffs like different pans, meat chopper, and fruit mixer. Definitely, a woman can cook much easier and faster than a woman who has a very small kitchen with no extra help from modern kitchen instruments.
On the contrary, some people may believe that very comfortable and expensive life can be a distraction for young people to get strong. It can be true in some cases. For example, a girl child who always have everything she wanted may never think that life can be hard sometimes. She may even end up going to parties all times, spending so much money on her clothes, and wasting her time as she grows up. As a result, she may even does not finish her high-school. She may even does not care about having a good job in the future.
As someone grow up as a normal person with ordinary life, he/she may be more independent person compare to someone who has a very comfortable life. But It does not mean that rich people will not be successful in their lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 29, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'luxuries'' or 'luxury's'?
Suggestion: luxuries'; luxury's
The statement mentions that luxuries life can prevent individuals to be inde...
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Line 3, column 391, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a help from modern kitchen instruments. On the contrary, some people may believe...
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Line 5, column 12, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'grows'.
Suggestion: grows
... a good job in the future. As someone grow up as a normal person with ordinary lif...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, still, for example, in addition, as a result, first of all, in some cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1469.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 330.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45151515152 5.05705443957 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43612429097 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 704.065955056 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9020179117 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.3157894737 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3684210526 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05263157895 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.095712564842 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391891473543 0.0831039109588 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466940884971 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0722540304625 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482629916759 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 14.1392134831 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 12.1639044944 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 100.480337079 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.7820224719 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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