a. There is an increasing amount of advertising directed at children, which encourages them to buy goods such as toys and snacks. Many parents are worried that these advertisements put too much pressure on children while some advertisers claim that they provide useful information to children. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.
In recent times, it is commonly thought that advertising aimed at children tends to be rising constantly, making them appealing to purchase toys and snacks. While many people believe that these kinds of advertisements can present some severe dangers to children’s mental well-being, advertisers totally are likely to deny the accusations and assume that they allow children to access helpful information.
On the one hand, regarding those who protest the advertising of leading factors being children, they argue that children are easily attracted and persuaded by these advertisements and may pester their parents to the products advertised on television or social media. To be precise, in some cases, several products being advertised might be unnecessary and useless for them, leading to unwanted financial burdens on their parents and family budgets in general.
On the other hand, turning to several advertiser views, advertisements can place a value on children’s mindset. Firstly, through mass media, displaying the advertising’s unfavorable impacts of some snakes or worthless playing tools can help parents take awareness of what is actually worth for them to buy and how to choose one properly for their children. Secondly, together with the limit of commercial advertising programs, advertisements about children's education can promote children’s creativity and values such as courtesy, honesty, courage, and friendship as well. For example, thanks to the advertising of engineering broadcasting widely in the national commission, children aged 6 or above can have potential opportunities to obtain certain knowledge about physics or sometimes may broaden amazing insights into human machines or structures.
To conclude, I support the view that advertisements directed at children can bring both advantages and disadvantages. However, the benefits of advertising eclipse the downsides and exert a massive influence on the adult’s little ones if adults can direct it in the sustainable and right ways
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in general, such as, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1729.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72516556291 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13341100876 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639072847682 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.0235916091 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.9 106.682146367 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2 20.7667163134 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.6 7.06120827912 221% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.39648115831 0.244688304435 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176762261591 0.084324248473 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677823374437 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250483502881 0.151304729494 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532056885934 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.7 13.0946893788 158% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 50.2224549098 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.55 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.67 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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