The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. School should cut art and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on useful subject such as information technology. To what extent do you agree.
Nowadays, we cannot deny that education is the most important for children. Education has a duty to prepare children to live in the modern world with happiness. There are many subjects that were taught in school. Some people believe that school should focus on the subjects such as information technology and deduct art and music. In my view, I strongly disagree with this statement.
There are many reasons that art and music are still important currently. Firstly, both subjects can release you from an extension situation. Secondly, these subjects make you feel relax and fulfill your energy when you feel bored. For example, when children boring to do homework, they can enjoy singing a song. Finally, art and music make you feel calm. After that, it is easier to create new ideas after you listen to music or see some pictures.
Nevertheless, some people argue that art and music were antique subjects which is not necessary for recent days. Hence, students should not learn it because it wastes time. Moreover, students should study information technology instead of art and music since it will be more crucial in the future world. The main reason is in modern society, we always using IT for finding every information. For instance, we are serving the internet for finding new worldwide information.
In conclusion, every subject is valuable in its selves. So, we should not ignore each area. No one knows what will happen in the future, maybe one day you will need to use this knowledge.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 305, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ll be more crucial in the future world. The main reason is in modern society, we...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, hence, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1253.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97222222222 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47011298848 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.8306173259 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.9473684211 106.682146367 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.2631578947 20.7667163134 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94736842105 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409420842013 0.244688304435 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105177681759 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704618813693 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218785356278 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0935377465508 0.056905535591 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 13.0946893788 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 50.2224549098 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.66 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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