People believe that individuals who make a lot of money are the most successful. Others say that those who contribute to society like scientists, teacher are the most successful. Discuss both and give your opinion?
There is a public argument over the definition of individuals’ success. People have no common idea about weather money or social contributions make someone successful person. Personally, I am part of them whose definition of success is about serving the community.
On one hand, the wealthy is clearly found as successful people for they are able to enjoy their life to the fullest. They can afford the possession of life style they desire like driving luxury car, living in large apartment, etc. And literally, lots of people admire these material values . As a result, they tend to let money define their success. Moreover, the wealth is mostly people who have high position in society, run large business or influence and impact on the community. Their fruitful and noble images signify their success at large. For instant, a celebrity with eye-catching look is dropped off an expensive car while the fans and journalists are noisily surrounding. To be sure that many people want to own these things. That’s why they set the wealth as role model and consider them as successful individuals.
If money makers bring about the joyful life that makes them admirable, people as educators and scientists do it far better. Firstly, they also have brilliant careers with handsome salary and high social status. It’s obvious that talented people with extensive knowledge like them rarely fail in making money. Secondly, the contribution they invest in helping the world the better world. For example, the scientist with rich collection of helpful studies about renewing rocket. It certainly brings them high income and almost everybody’s respect and warm approval result in helping reduce the waste and save money. That’s why the level of success they enjoy should be placed above the rich or the affluent.
To conclude, at some point of views, achieving wealth is acknowledged as a state of success. However, I’m of belief that the social accomplishment contributed by intellectuals outweigh material values; and it make them the most successful ones.
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Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
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...ctuals outweigh material values; and it make them the most successful ones.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22590361446 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70240572276 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605421686747 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.8104207292 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.619047619 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8095238095 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19047619048 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 8.67935871743 230% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24939341969 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725731793483 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499729945668 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158368368701 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257700651805 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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