People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
As far as I am concerned, there are more benefits for people to travel in their own country because not only it is more convenient but also, its expenses are lower. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint my case.
The first reason worth mentioning is that it is more comfortable and easy for people to travel in their own country. Each country has a unique and official language that is used by most people. As a result, people from one country can communicate with each other without any difficulty. It is plausible that different languages are used in many countries, but all of them have an official one that is known by them. However, traveling abroad is more complex since people need to know the language of that country and because of it, communication will become harder for people. For instance, my friend went on travel inside our country. Since he knew the language, he learned about the culture and customs of that place. But his trip to France was hard for him. Although he was familiar with English, most people speak French and he could not socialize with other people which made him miserable.
A furthure more subtle point is that it does not require to have a lot of money and its cheaper. In recent years, since the price of oil has been increased, tickets for airplanes become very expensive which many people cannot afford them. Also, the currency of our country has lesser value in comparison to other countries. Therefore, the option of traveling abroad is not a possibility. Nevertheless, traveling inside our country does not need a lot of money and if people could not buy a ticket for an airplane, they could use their own cars or even rent it. In this way, travelers could decline their expenses and save their money for better costs. Moreover, there are more enjoyments for people in driving. They could enjoy the environment, take a break whenever they wanted, or even go visit beautiful places encounter along the way. For these kinds of people, the duration of airplane travel is extremely tiresome. Therefore, They get bored easily and could not enjoy the trip, and consider it a waste of time.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, there are more advantages for people to travel inside their own country due to ease in traveling inside the country and lower cost and expenses.
- People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries 70
- TPO48 80
- For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. 86
- In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. 68
- Integrated TOEFL writing-TPO 4 3
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77450980392 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52025626813 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509803921569 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4445595221 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5454545455 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5454545455 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31818181818 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377198787775 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106468556597 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105638189538 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.275960796499 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531111901804 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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