Mission QUESTION FOR GIRLS Young people should spend more time in cultural activities such as music and theatre and less time in sports To what extent do you agree with this statement

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Mission: QUESTION FOR GIRLS (Young people should spend more time in cultural activities such as music and theatre, and less time in sports. To what extent do you agree with this statement?).

I agree with the fact that young people should spend a lot of time on cultural activities, such as music, art, theater, which is very good and meaningful for young people, while spending less time for sports, for me, I disagree with that opinion.
Firstly, with the development of technology, smartphones are necessary and popular items, especially young people, nowadays almost everyone has a phone. I think the conditions for studying and learning are adequate, but not everyone can take advantage of that, social networks have made many young people less likely to participate in activities, cultural knowledge is also limited. music. and stage.
Secondly, about spending time in culture like music, theater and spending less time on sports, I find it unreasonable because sports activities are also very rewarding, it is important that sports are also part of culture.
Finally, each person has a hobby and passion for himself, someone who likes to exercise, someone who likes to explore, study, sing, and dance. It is important that we show young people how to balance their lives in terms of study, sports and socio-cultural issues, this is important and inevitable.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 3, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
I agree with the fact that young people should spend a lot of time...
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Line 2, column 383, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Music
...es, cultural knowledge is also limited. music. and stage. Secondly, about spending t...
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Line 2, column 390, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...tural knowledge is also limited. music. and stage. Secondly, about spending time i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, while, i think, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 41.998997996 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 986.0 1615.20841683 61% => OK
No of words: 190.0 315.596192385 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18947368421 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 4.20363070211 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69820911161 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 176.041082164 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610526315789 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 311.4 506.74238477 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.3820803524 49.4020404114 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.333333333 106.682146367 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6666666667 20.7667163134 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5 7.06120827912 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365906393053 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135256294779 0.084324248473 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132733143938 0.0667982634062 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217627475234 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120733047037 0.056905535591 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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