rules today on young people are too strict
here can be numerous factors to consider when addressing the extent of the freedom that in granted to young people today. Some may argue that due to civic developments there are collectively more rules to follow, while opponents may disprove this notion and claim due to cultural advancements there are imposing less obligations for the youth today. I agree with the latter, and I believe that while there are many rules in place today, there are mostly in favor of young people and their freedom. I will elaborate further as follows.
First, although innumerable detailed rules are present in today's societies, they are mostly promoting and protecting human rights against factors that threaten them. The value of populations and human resources has seen a great accelaratin in the recent years, and young people are able to make demands, request their own rules, within the boundary on not invading others' rights. For instance, the recognition of transgender and homosexual populations has occured in the past decade and the active rules are potentially supporting these populations against those who want to harm or disrespect them.
Secondly, the emergence of technology and social media has contributed immensely to the improvement in the awareness of the human rights and making the demands of the youth heard. Today, young people start trends and they promote context addressing their issues in huge social circles when they feel they are under unjustified compulsory rules. The expansion of social media has also faded the differences between older generations and younger ones, enabling them to understand each other better. As an example, referring to myself, when I was a teenager my parents were mostly strict about my interactions with my friends from the opposite gender. In contrast, today, my sister is allowed to freely spend time with her male friends. My parents claim that numerous posts, awareness campaings regarding the mindset and needs of adolescents in addition to observing the life of teenagers from all over the world, has made them realize their mistakes and soften some rather strict obligations.
In conclusion, I believe that the development and swift progression of technology and social media has made the regulations on young people easier. Additionally, the increased social value of individuals, especially young people, in societies' structures has been a determinant in shaping the rules which are mostly protective of young people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Here
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...granted to young people today. Some may argue that due to civic developments there ar...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun obligations is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ultural advancements there are imposing less obligations for the youth today. I agre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32908163265 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76091483361 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561224489796 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.4864509152 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.266666667 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1333333333 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304452643235 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920619353107 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767340379496 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184001645745 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592182816881 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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