Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
he education policy regarding the school-age children can be vary in different families. I believe that there does not exist a best policy, whereas I do not consider give children more money for good grade makes positive effect for them. In the following essay, I will explain why I stand this point of view.
To begin with, obtain good grades does not aim to honor the parents, but aims to evaluate the study performance of children. Consequently, they should take responsibility for themselves, not for the money instead. If they do it for the money, they will not be able to improve themselves without the benefit. Take my cousin for example, she always got extra money during the high school. However, since she left home after entering the university, no one would give her extra money, and her grade dropped drastically.
Furthermore, I do not regard the grade as the most important thing for school-age children. There are still numerous critical things, such as morality, good emotion, or friendly personality. As a result, if I hold the intention to offer my child more money because of his or her fabulous behavior, high grades will not be one of my standards, in order to avoid he or she becomes too arrogant. For example, when I was young, my mom never gave me extra money even if I got the first place on the exam. I really appreciate her now because she taught me the grades is not the most important thing. As a result, I can be a much humble person, at least in my viewpoint.
Finally, I actually doubt that giving more money for high grade can truly raise the grade. Imagine if you got more money occasionally because of unexpected high grade, I would preserve it as accidentally revenue. In the meanwhile, if I had the ability to get the good grade constantly, it meant I do not need that money to encourage me to study. As a result, I hold the belief there will be a better way to improve children's academic behavior.
Given the reasons above, I firmly believe that provide the children more money for each high grade is not a good idea. It is not to say that the parents reward children on this way is totally unreasonable. However, I believe I have substantiated my point of view.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
he education policy regarding the school-a...
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Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...es. I believe that there does not exist a best policy, whereas I do not consider ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, really, regarding, so, still, whereas, while, at least, for example, such as, as a result, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63867684478 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66102777734 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506361323155 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1942200588 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8095238095 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90476190476 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381415043963 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110488177725 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0791897396045 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223526075249 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280769374584 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
he education policy regarding the school-a...
^^
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...es. I believe that there does not exist a best policy, whereas I do not consider ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, really, regarding, so, still, whereas, while, at least, for example, such as, as a result, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63867684478 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66102777734 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506361323155 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1942200588 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8095238095 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90476190476 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381415043963 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110488177725 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0791897396045 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223526075249 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280769374584 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.