The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in
the last ten years.
Throughout the last decade, nearly a 20% rise in the number of children who are obese has been noticed in western societies. This essay will thoroughly discuss the main reasons and consequences of this worrying trend.
One prime cause of this issue is bad nutrition and following poor diets. This is mainly because of the widespread of fast food restaurants over the past ten years. However, the meals and food prepared in such places are proven to be very unhealthy, and yet many children prefer eating fast food over homemade healthy meals. Furthermore, it is not only due to eating out, but also living a sedentary lifestyle can cause children obesity. Kids spending most of their day time on video games and mobile phones is interestingly commonplace, which reduces their movement throughout the day and becoming less physically active. Therefore, obesity and fatness is mostly occurring in children.
The outcome of this case is quite dangerous. Firstly, overweight leads to serious health issues that might affect the child severely, thus he or she won’t be able to continue their lives normally. We can take diabetes as an evident example, this illness means a child has to be injected with insulin for the rest of their life. Another thing, many overweight children receive criticism from the surrounding, especially bullying from other kids in schools, which leaves a negative impact on a child’s mentality losing their self confidence.
In conclusion, the reasons for obesity amongst kids are obviously numerous, and so are the negative consequences of it. Society in general, especially parents, must start working on deterring the spread of the issue.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, another thing, as to, in conclusion, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1401.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18888888889 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69670580936 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.662962962963 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5638708467 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.071428571 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123218984863 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0382120521385 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499147471835 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0705398028982 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384393943874 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, another thing, as to, in conclusion, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1401.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18888888889 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69670580936 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.662962962963 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5638708467 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.071428571 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123218984863 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0382120521385 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499147471835 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0705398028982 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384393943874 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.