Recent advancement in technology have made the TV screen so live that people donot feel to go for any live performance To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Recent advancement in technology have made the TV screen so live that people donot feel to go for any live performance.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is irrefutable to state that there are plethora of electronic gadgets are used by Individuals for entertainment.Nowdays development in machinery have made the television display so live that dwellers donot need to go for any live performance.I,agree with this statement to a large extent as there is high cost of live concert and people have hectic schedule.

To commence with, folks can spend time with family.When they will watch live performance on television screen, they can devote quality time with their loved.Resultantly, they can make better relationships with their family members.In addition to this, it is a stress buster activity for people.At present, everyone is depressed due to overloading of work so they watch comedy shows on tv display at home for entertaining.To exemplify, kapil sharma live show is watched by people to overcome their stress.
Moving further, live shows are expensive.Most of the individuals prefer to watch live shows on television rather than personally visited because tickets of these shows are expensive.To epitome people watch live cricket match on television .Moreover, they have hectic schedule.Folks have no leisure time to attend live performance but they love to watch live shows that is possible due to TV screen at home. Consequently, they can watch live concerts on television screen during house hold chores.So,why not individuals want to live performance on TV screen if they have no free time to visit at live program?

However,i may not overlook the other side too, individuals have excitement to see their favourite celebrities.They want to met their dearest personality and they attend live concert directly.For instance,in Punjab,most of people Visited in Kabaddi live concert to met their favourite players.What is more, it put adverse impact on youngsters health.While watching television,they also watch advertisement related to energy drinks.Eventually, they try to these drinks which cause numerous health problems.

To recapitulate, undoubtedly, telivision is beneficial for people in ample of factors .Although it put adverse impact on adults health, yet it is a stress buster activity for individuals.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, well, while, for instance, in addition, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55555555556 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.4315219525 2.80592935109 122% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540540540541 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 55.0 20.2975951904 271% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 128.320886842 49.4020404114 260% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 308.333333333 106.682146367 289% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 55.5 20.7667163134 267% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 19.1666666667 7.06120827912 271% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 5.01903807615 598% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294520446299 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177434921161 0.084324248473 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0972750948195 0.0667982634062 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17483376691 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106951512084 0.056905535591 188% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.5 13.0946893788 248% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 7.19 50.2224549098 14% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 18.2 7.44779559118 244% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.9 11.3001002004 229% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.86 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.68 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.0 9.78957915832 327% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.0 10.1190380762 237% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 26.0 10.7795591182 241% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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