Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers
Nowadays, with a competitive world both parents can’t spend more time for their children and teacher in school don’t have so much time to teach child about the social and emotional learning, but I think that actually true because in the teenager age they usually want to be different and don’t respect for the models behaviour like hard work or politeness. In my point of view, I think some young people today are so rebellious and it hard for families or teacher to teach them. So, I do not agree with that statement is the basic reason to increase in teenager violence.
To lead the younger to wrong it have so many factors can affect them, and economy factors is one of them, for example. If a child come from a poor family and living in low quality housing, this is sure that children can be affected, however have a loving family.
Other factors can come from their friend because at this age teenager want to be express themselves with their friend, so friends actually have more influence than parents. At that age, they want to be a part of groups, or even a gang that might lead them to breaking the law and go a wrong way.
In Conclusion, I still agree that lack of social and emotional learning from parents and teachers is a factor increase younger violence, but it not the only factor or even the main cause. Because at that age they still not fully developed so they can be affected by anything in their life.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 311, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'models'' or 'model's'?
Suggestion: models'; model's
... be different and don’t respect for the models behaviour like hard work or politeness....
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 33, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...lence. To lead the younger to wrong it have so many factors can affect them, and ec...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, so, still, for example, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1181.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54230769231 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31961981684 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530769230769 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 360.0 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.9930354599 49.4020404114 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.222222222 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8888888889 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.22222222222 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177939319652 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792717604168 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409740978846 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112630504277 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521283196793 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 11.3001002004 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 78.4519038076 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 311, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'models'' or 'model's'?
Suggestion: models'; model's
... be different and don’t respect for the models behaviour like hard work or politeness....
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 33, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...lence. To lead the younger to wrong it have so many factors can affect them, and ec...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, so, still, for example, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1181.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54230769231 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31961981684 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530769230769 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 360.0 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.9930354599 49.4020404114 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.222222222 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8888888889 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.22222222222 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177939319652 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792717604168 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409740978846 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112630504277 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521283196793 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 11.3001002004 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 78.4519038076 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.