The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
The passage may seem convincing at the very first glance but a careful reading of the passage reveals many of its critical flaws. The writer's conclusion that prohibition of skate boarding would promote the business in central plaza to its previously high levels is supported with no causal linkages. The unjustified assumptions of the given passage are explained and elaborated as follows:
The writer states that the central plaza has been experiencing a steady decrease in its number of shoppers but it does not give any actuarial data to show how steady the decline is in its number of customer...
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Sentence: It can infact enhance the business and popularity by attracting people to central plaza and giving a chance them to try a recreational activity that no ordinary arcade provides.
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