Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones.
Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Humans are becoming smarter and smarter; therefore, a myriad of state-of-the-art equipment are invented in order to assist people in their daily life. However, the current situation is that the young nowadays devote a whole lot of their time per day to using their smart device. In this essay, I would like to discuss the driving force behind this trend and whether it is advantageous or not.
The first reason worth mentioning is that the young now have to do a plenty of tasks on equipment such as laptops or smartphones as creating assignments on the digital-based device is much easier than the conventional one. Another major cause of this case is the youngsters’ requirement of entertainment. There are lots of captivating videos, posts on the Internet and furthermore, almost all of their friends use social networks to keep in touch with one another which forces them to do the same.
So do the children take advantage of this trend? Regarding the beneficial effects of this case, the young can acquire more knowledge from internet-based lessons including tiktok or facebook since the contents on these networking sites are diverse. Another significant point is that children are able to relieve stress after hours of studying by playing their favourite video games, surfing the internet, chatting with friends,...
Despite the positive influence mentioned above, there are a multitude of bad effects. First of all, the eyesights of children are impaired due to long-hour exposure to computer or smartphone screens and other health problems arise by virtue of this circumstance such as obesity which is the major cause of sedentary lifestyle. The second issue is that recent contents on the Internet are plentiful so the censorship often omits to eradicate the unsuitable contents posted on the Internet-based network. Therefore, the young will inevitably be affected by toxic stuffs. Furthermore, some pop-stars or influencers promote their immoral images on social media. The consequence is that the children act like their idols and sometimes can even be super aggressive. Last but not least, the academic results of children are exacerbated, given that they spend hour and hour on smart equipment. it can be even worse for the students who have to take an entrance exam which is a milestone of their lifetime.
In conclusion, the benefits of this trend are overwhelmed by the disadvantages. Personally, I do not encourage this case and i highly recommend the young to adopt the similar.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: WHOLE_LOT[1]
Message: Use simply 'lot'.
Suggestion: lot
...ion is that the young nowadays devote a whole lot of their time per day to using their sm...
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Line 5, column 426, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...fing the internet, chatting with friends,... Despite the positive influence men...
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Line 7, column 456, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... often omits to eradicate the unsuitable contents posted on the Internet-based ne...
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Line 7, column 888, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...spend hour and hour on smart equipment. it can be even worse for the students who ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 406.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19950738916 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93770921082 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576354679803 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5038563783 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.105263158 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3684210526 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293427144004 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840825720637 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550325350409 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160688493217 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272415297937 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 78.4519038076 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: WHOLE_LOT[1]
Message: Use simply 'lot'.
Suggestion: lot
...ion is that the young nowadays devote a whole lot of their time per day to using their sm...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 426, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...fing the internet, chatting with friends,... Despite the positive influence men...
^^
Line 7, column 456, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... often omits to eradicate the unsuitable contents posted on the Internet-based ne...
^^
Line 7, column 888, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...spend hour and hour on smart equipment. it can be even worse for the students who ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 406.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19950738916 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93770921082 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576354679803 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5038563783 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.105263158 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3684210526 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293427144004 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840825720637 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550325350409 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160688493217 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272415297937 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 78.4519038076 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.