There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company. Some believe that money is the main reason. Do you agree or disagree?
It is a common belief that workers’ income is the chief factor that keeps them working for the same company. While I agree that this may be beneficial for firms and people working for, I still believe that it could bring individuals a number of drawbacks.
It is true that people remain working for their company for money would be advantageous for itself and themselves. The first argument given to support my opinion is that people might spend their time at work just to get promoted or higher salary. As a matter of fact, money plays an important role in every aspect of humans’ life. This might lead to that people may utilize money in most of their daily-basic needs, they allocate budget to purchase for food and goods, pay taxes, invest for their children and address personal issues. To this happens, workers might need to work harder and with all commitments to meet demand due to the fact that working environment could be considered a competitive market with greater amount of money being the only goal people are trying to achieve. Another reason worth mentioning is that more workers commiting to do their job as to get better income means more companies may derive significant benefits from this, especially when it comes to boosting sales and profits. As a result, this would bring a considerable number of advantages to lay the foundation for the dramatic development of the economy.
Nevertheless, i would argue that with salary being an important element for people remaining at the same company turns out to take a toll on individuals. Chief among these is that it might lead workers to frequent-mental breakdown. It cannot be denied that the rise in working hours in order to acquire company’s demand and personal needs tends to require a person to reach his limit, or in other words, to spend extra time at work. So that a number of people do not have time for themselves resulting from overworking, this creates an overwhelmed and stressful atmostphere at working space, of which the company’s success could be at the expense in the long term. The second reason is that people may suffer from many diseases relevant to body’s functions. This is simply because long working hour would not only make people feel more anxious and depressed but it may also slow down their process of thinking and movement. A case in point is that standing or sitting too long depending on their job both means that humans’ brain is likely to focus on one thing in a great deal of time and other body’s functions could not operate appropriately, which has the intention to lead an unhealthy lifestyle.
In the light of points above, although I agree with the belief that money is a valuable factor for workers to stay working in the same working place, I am of the opinion that it might contain a wide range of downsides.
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- There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company Some believe that money is the main reason Do you agree or disagree 73
- There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company Some believe that money is the main reason Do you agree or disagree 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 15, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...pment of the economy. Nevertheless, i would argue that with salary being an i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, still, while, as to, as a matter of fact, as a result, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 7.85571142285 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 7.30460921844 287% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 53.0 24.0651302605 220% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2359.0 1615.20841683 146% => OK
No of words: 491.0 315.596192385 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80448065173 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59030470984 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507128309572 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 713.7 506.74238477 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.3419322605 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.764705882 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8823529412 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233056971151 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794088856246 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544993655584 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163291968222 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0156858745545 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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