The bar chart shows the percentage of adults who were overweight or obese (too fat or much too fat) in one country from 1965 to 2015. The pie chart
shows the proportion of adults who were overweight, obese or severely obese in2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
The bar chart compares the percentage of adults who were overweight or obese in one country between 1965 and 2015, while the pie chart illustrates the proportion of adults who were overweight, obese or severely obese in 2015.
Overall ,the highest percentage of adults who were overweight or obese increased steadily from 1965 to 2015 and that the highest percentage is in the adults who were obese and the lowest percentage is in the adults who were severely obese.
The percentage of adults who were overweight or obese rose slightly, from 46% in 1965 to 47% in 1975 and stayed constant at 47% between 1975 and 1985. The increase was greatest in 1985, from about 47% in 1985 to 59% in 1995. There was a rising trend from 1995 onwards and the highest was 73% in 2015
The pie chart compares that adults who were obese were more popular than all the others, at 34%. The adults who were overweight at 31% and healthy or underweight at 29%. The adults who were severely obese at 6%
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 823.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67613636364 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3668506881 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 74.0 106.607317073 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.420454545455 0.547539520022 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 237.6 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 145.361331401 43.030603864 338% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 137.166666667 112.824112599 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3333333333 22.9334400587 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.833333333333 5.23603664747 16% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.560403000629 0.215688989381 260% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.293010958168 0.103423049105 283% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.192173801578 0.0843802449381 228% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.416088184678 0.15604864568 267% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.174209094844 0.0819641961636 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.42 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 40.7170731707 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 11.4329268293 236% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 27.0 11.0658536585 244% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.