The bar chart shows the number of people who visited different museums in London

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The bar chart shows the number of people who visited different museums in London.

The bar chart give information about the number of people who visited different museums in London.
In generally, British Museum was the most popular visited throughout the year. While National Museum has fewest visitors on the chart. It is clear that, August is the most touristy time for 4 types of museums in London.
At first, British Museum had the highest people visiting in June at around 410,000. While the number of people who visited National Museum approximately 200,000 in June. Over 700,000 guests went to British museum in August. The National museum also increased slightly to 300,000 at the same time. One month later, both museums recorded considerably close to 600,000 and 200,000 respectively. In December, the proportion of visitors to the British Museum constantly declined under 500,000. While the figure for National Museum remained stable after one month
Science Museum was the highest vacationers in June by almost 470,000. Whereas, more than 400,000 travelers came to the History Museum as of June. Nearly double the amount of arrivals went to History Museum in August. The opposite was true for the Science Museum was dropped down at about 410,000 visitors. After a month, Science museum welcomed the highest number of visitors in September compared to other months, with 500,000 people choose this place to visit. In the final month on the chart, those line all fell at 250,000 and 300,000 alternately.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 79, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...st popular visited throughout the year. While National Museum has fewest visitors on ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 101, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'has the fewest'.
Suggestion: has the fewest
...oughout the year. While National Museum has fewest visitors on the chart. It is clear that...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, whereas, while, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1203.0 965.302439024 125% => OK
No of words: 232.0 196.424390244 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18534482759 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4574825375 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 106.607317073 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547413793103 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 349.2 283.868780488 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.7824431542 43.030603864 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.1875 112.824112599 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5 22.9334400587 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.9375 5.23603664747 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322395676212 0.215688989381 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137112792655 0.103423049105 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.161646657917 0.0843802449381 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.310602179709 0.15604864568 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.227750402456 0.0819641961636 278% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.2329268293 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.23 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.4329268293 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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