Governments should support care and finance for retired people while others believe that they should save money when they get older. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
All people in the world set the same goal for their lives when they come to the retirement stage. It has been argued by some individuals that governments should provide healthcare and money-related assistance for retirees, while others express their discontent that it is no longer suitable when people have to know ways to be a master of their lives. In my opinion, people should save their own money to use when they get older freely.
On the one hand, governments should create health and financial welfare to aid retired citizens. It means that this is a way of compensation for their contribution to their youth. The development of cities and a country comes from a huge amount of tax payments from big businesses as well and the national budget is also enriched from that. Additionally, each individual in a country also contributes to businesses’ profit to help them pay taxes when they spend a significant amount of money on basic necessities such as clothes, furniture or vehicles. Furthermore, authorities, officials and police officers receive their each month's wages from tax money. However, it is not advisable for governments to spend excessive amounts of money on social welfare as it could be used to solve pressing social issues such as environmental pollution or the housing price crisis.
On the other hand, it is better for retired people to save a sum of money during their working time because this allows them to have a sense of independence. It means that they will not depend entirely on anyone else. Each one also has a private demand for basic necessities and entertainment. When having their own money-saving, retirees can freely organize and satisfy their goals and expectations in their young time such as travelling worldwide and buying a home for their children. Moreover, obviously, the national budget can not suffice to pay for every citizen's needs.
In conclusion, it is essential to have a sum of money saving for each individual when they can do whatever they desire instead of relying on government support.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 495, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
... spend a significant amount of money on basic necessities such as clothes, furniture or vehicles....
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Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
... Each one also has a private demand for basic necessities and entertainment. When having their ow...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1712.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00584795322 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85512504045 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540935672515 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.683103758 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.133333333 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298791796781 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110156618242 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101193106589 0.0667982634062 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215498941309 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0988241549045 0.056905535591 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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