The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that
it has become a more important form of documentation than written records.
According to the speaker, the video recording is a more important means of document hag
contemporary life than a written record because video recordings are more accurate and
convincing. Although I agree that a video provides a more objective and accurate record of an
event's spatial aspects, there is far more to document ha life than what we see and hear. Thus
the speaker overstates the comparative significance of video as a documentary tool.
For the purpose of documenting temporal, spatial events and experiences, I agree that a
video record is usually more accurate and more convincing than a written record. It is
impossible for anyone, no matter how keen an observer and skilled a journalist, to recount ha
complete and objective detail such events as the winning touchdown at the Super Bowl, a
Ballanchine ballet, the Tournament of Roses Parade, or the scene at the intersection of
Florence and Normandy streets during the 1992 Los Angeles riots. Yet these are important
events in contemporary life the sort of events we might put ha a time capsule for the purpose
of capturing our life and times at the turn of this millennium.
The growing documentary role of video is not limited to seminal events like those described
above. Video surveillance cameras are objective witnesses with perfect memories. Thus they
can play a vital evidentiary role in legal proceedings--such as those involving robbery, drug
trafficking, police misconduct, motor vehicle violations, and even malpractice in a hospital
operating room. Indeed, whenever moving images are central to an event the video camera is
superior to the written word. A written description of a hurricane, tornado, or volcanic eruption
cannot convey its immediate power and awesome nature like a video record. A diary entry
cannot "replay" that wedding reception, dance recital, or surprise birthday party as accurately
or objectively as a video record. And a real estate brochure cannot inform about the lighting,
spaciousness, or general ambiance of a featured property nearly as effectively as a video.
Nonetheless, for certain other purposes written records are advantageous to and more
appropriate than video records. For example, certain legal matters are best left to written documentation: video is of no practical use ha documenting the terms of a complex contractual
agreement, an incorporation, or the establishment of a trust. And video is of little use when it
comes to documenting a person's subjective state of mind, impressions, or reflections of an
event or experience. Indeed, to the extent that personal interpretation adds dimension and
richness to the record, written documentation is actually more important than video.
Finally, a video record is of no use in documenting statistical or other quantitative information.
Returning to the riot example mentioned earlier, imagine relying on a video to document the
financial loss to store owners, the number of police and firefighters involved, and so forth.
Complete and accurate video documentation of such information would require video cameras
at every street corner and in every aisle of every store.
In sum, the speaker's claim overstates the importance of video records, at least to some
extent. When it comes to capturing, storing, and recalling temporal, spatial events, video
records are inherently more objective, accurate, and complete. However, what we view
through a camera lens provides only one dimension of our life and times; written
documentation will always be needed to quantify, demystify, and provide meaning to the world
around us.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s a more important means of document hag contemporary life than a written record ...
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...e video recordings are more accurate and convincing. Although I agree that a vide...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an event' or simply 'events'?
Suggestion: an event; events
...a more objective and accurate record of an events spatial aspects, there is far more to d...
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...more objective and accurate record of an events spatial aspects, there is far mor...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ment ha life than what we see and hear. Thus the speaker overstates the comparativ...
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... ha life than what we see and hear. Thus the speaker overstates the comparative s...
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...l events and experiences, I agree that a video record is usually more accurate an...
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Line 7, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... convincing than a written record. It is impossible for anyone, no matter how kee...
^^^
Line 8, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... and skilled a journalist, to recount ha complete and objective detail such event...
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Line 9, column 88, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...e winning touchdown at the Super Bowl, a Ballanchine ballet, the Tournament of Ro...
^^^
Line 10, column 88, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ade, or the scene at the intersection of Florence and Normandy streets during the...
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Line 11, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...s Angeles riots. Yet these are important events in contemporary life the sort of ...
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Line 12, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ht put ha a time capsule for the purpose of capturing our life and times at the t...
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Line 14, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...d to seminal events like those described above. Video surveillance cameras are ob...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ective witnesses with perfect memories. Thus they can play a vital evidentiary rol...
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...tnesses with perfect memories. Thus they can play a vital evidentiary role in leg...
^^^
Line 16, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...s--such as those involving robbery, drug trafficking, police misconduct, motor ve...
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Line 17, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ions, and even malpractice in a hospital operating room. Indeed, whenever moving ...
^^^
Line 18, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... central to an event the video camera is superior to the written word. A written ...
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Line 19, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hurricane, tornado, or volcanic eruption cannot convey its immediate power and aw...
^^^
Line 20, column 88, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ature like a video record. A diary entry cannot 'replay' that wedding r...
^^^
Line 21, column 106, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...or surprise birthday party as accurately or objectively as a video record. And a ...
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Line 22, column 95, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ochure cannot inform about the lighting, spaciousness, or general ambiance of a f...
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Line 24, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ten records are advantageous to and more appropriate than video records. For exam...
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Line 25, column 186, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...nting the terms of a complex contractual agreement, an incorporation, or the esta...
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Line 26, column 97, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rust. And video is of little use when it comes to documenting a persons subjectiv...
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Line 27, column 22, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...ttle use when it comes to documenting a persons subjective state of mind, impressions, ...
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Line 27, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... mind, impressions, or reflections of an event or experience. Indeed, to the exte...
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Line 28, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...rsonal interpretation adds dimension and richness to the record, written document...
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...agine relying on a video to document the financial loss to store owners, the numb...
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... information would require video cameras at every street corner and in every aisl...
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...tance of video records, at least to some extent. When it comes to capturing, stor...
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Line 36, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ecalling temporal, spatial events, video records are inherently more objective, a...
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Line 37, column 85, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ate, and complete. However, what we view through a camera lens provides only one ...
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...dimension of our life and times; written documentation will always be needed to q...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ystify, and provide meaning to the world around us.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, however, if, nonetheless, so, thus, at least, for example, sort of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 14.8657303371 222% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3105.0 2235.4752809 139% => OK
No of words: 568.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46654929577 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13640450241 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517605633803 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 1001.7 704.065955056 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 15.0 1.77640449438 844% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6306930931 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.0 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6956521739 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08695652174 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 39.0 4.97078651685 785% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 36.0 7.80617977528 461% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.516117653911 0.243740707755 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152991545931 0.0831039109588 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131025460944 0.0758088955206 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120309200209 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137244077346 0.0667264976115 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.1392134831 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 48.8420337079 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 171.0 100.480337079 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s a more important means of document hag contemporary life than a written record ...
^^^
Line 2, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e video recordings are more accurate and convincing. Although I agree that a vide...
^^^
Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an event' or simply 'events'?
Suggestion: an event; events
...a more objective and accurate record of an events spatial aspects, there is far more to d...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...more objective and accurate record of an events spatial aspects, there is far mor...
^^^
Line 4, column 90, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ment ha life than what we see and hear. Thus the speaker overstates the comparativ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... ha life than what we see and hear. Thus the speaker overstates the comparative s...
^^^
Line 6, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l events and experiences, I agree that a video record is usually more accurate an...
^^^
Line 7, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... convincing than a written record. It is impossible for anyone, no matter how kee...
^^^
Line 8, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and skilled a journalist, to recount ha complete and objective detail such event...
^^^
Line 9, column 88, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e winning touchdown at the Super Bowl, a Ballanchine ballet, the Tournament of Ro...
^^^
Line 10, column 88, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ade, or the scene at the intersection of Florence and Normandy streets during the...
^^^
Line 11, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s Angeles riots. Yet these are important events in contemporary life the sort of ...
^^^
Line 12, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ht put ha a time capsule for the purpose of capturing our life and times at the t...
^^^
Line 14, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d to seminal events like those described above. Video surveillance cameras are ob...
^^^
Line 15, column 82, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ective witnesses with perfect memories. Thus they can play a vital evidentiary rol...
^^^^
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Suggestion:
...tnesses with perfect memories. Thus they can play a vital evidentiary role in leg...
^^^
Line 16, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s--such as those involving robbery, drug trafficking, police misconduct, motor ve...
^^^
Line 17, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ions, and even malpractice in a hospital operating room. Indeed, whenever moving ...
^^^
Line 18, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... central to an event the video camera is superior to the written word. A written ...
^^^
Line 19, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hurricane, tornado, or volcanic eruption cannot convey its immediate power and aw...
^^^
Line 20, column 88, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ature like a video record. A diary entry cannot 'replay' that wedding r...
^^^
Line 21, column 106, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...or surprise birthday party as accurately or objectively as a video record. And a ...
^^^
Line 22, column 95, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ochure cannot inform about the lighting, spaciousness, or general ambiance of a f...
^^^
Line 24, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ten records are advantageous to and more appropriate than video records. For exam...
^^^
Line 25, column 186, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nting the terms of a complex contractual agreement, an incorporation, or the esta...
^^^
Line 26, column 97, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rust. And video is of little use when it comes to documenting a persons subjectiv...
^^^
Line 27, column 22, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...ttle use when it comes to documenting a persons subjective state of mind, impressions, ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 27, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... mind, impressions, or reflections of an event or experience. Indeed, to the exte...
^^^
Line 28, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rsonal interpretation adds dimension and richness to the record, written document...
^^^
Line 31, column 92, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...agine relying on a video to document the financial loss to store owners, the numb...
^^^
Line 33, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... information would require video cameras at every street corner and in every aisl...
^^^
Line 35, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tance of video records, at least to some extent. When it comes to capturing, stor...
^^^
Line 36, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ecalling temporal, spatial events, video records are inherently more objective, a...
^^^
Line 37, column 85, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ate, and complete. However, what we view through a camera lens provides only one ...
^^^
Line 38, column 81, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...dimension of our life and times; written documentation will always be needed to q...
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Line 39, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ystify, and provide meaning to the world around us.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, however, if, nonetheless, so, thus, at least, for example, sort of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 14.8657303371 222% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3105.0 2235.4752809 139% => OK
No of words: 568.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46654929577 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13640450241 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517605633803 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 1001.7 704.065955056 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 15.0 1.77640449438 844% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6306930931 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.0 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6956521739 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08695652174 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 39.0 4.97078651685 785% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 36.0 7.80617977528 461% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.516117653911 0.243740707755 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152991545931 0.0831039109588 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131025460944 0.0758088955206 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120309200209 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137244077346 0.0667264976115 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.1392134831 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 48.8420337079 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 171.0 100.480337079 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.