How to live before you die. Speaker: Steve Jobs.
Steve Jobs started his speech with providing three empirical stories.
He named the first story as “connecting dots”. The story began how Steve was given up by his mother to other wealthy family who would be able to afford his college in the future. 17 years later, he went to a college which was as expensive as Stanford. Nevertheless, he dropped the college after six-month studying due to the fact that he had felt he was not getting anything from the classes. Then Steve embarked a calligraphy class, where he learnt exquisite typography. Eventually, what he learnt at the calligraphy class helped him to design first Macintosh computers. Thus, the speaker concluded that we do not know what lies ahead and what is meant for what we do; therefore, Steve advised that we can connect dots only looking back, not looking forward.
The story began how he was fired from Apple, the company which he founded, and the story called “love and loss”. He was dismissed by the board of directors from the job because Steve did not share the same viewpoint about the future of the company with his co-executive manager. However, the incident gave him new prospects, particularly, he founded two successful companies named Pixar and Next, also he found his wife. Later, Steve returned to his initial company since Next was purchased by Apple. Next was like a renaissance for Apple enhancing the company with new innovations. He concluded we have to keep looking what we love; he implied work by saying love. The bottom line of this story, as far as I understood, we should love what we do and that can become something great.
His final story was about death so was the story named. Steve asserted death is the best creation ever since it clears the old giving way to a new. Therefore, he urged to listen to own inner voice and do not let anyone eclipse it as our time is limited. Also, at this part Steve Jobs’s the most famous quotation was said: “Your time is limited so do not waste it living someone else’s life”. I was so impressed when I heard the statement first time as it inspires to find your true personality and to discover your advantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...only looking back, not looking forward. The story began how he was fired from Ap...
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Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...r since it clears the old giving way to a new. Therefore, he urged to listen to own i...
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Line 4, column 168, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'listening'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'urge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: listening
...iving way to a new. Therefore, he urged to listen to own inner voice and do not let anyon...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 378.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79100529101 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64423911625 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568783068783 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9736054504 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.55 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55 7.06120827912 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0780911979411 0.244688304435 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0258182896746 0.084324248473 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.029733920726 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0547313102897 0.151304729494 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0117654345151 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 0.67 Out of 6
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