Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age.

Submitted by dilroop on Fri, 06/21/2019 - 09:28

When it comes to decide what should be the ideal retirement age, different people have different views. Some believe every individual should retire after 65 years, regardless to his profession, while others maintain employees working for longer hours and in tough environmental conditions must retire at early age and receive pension benefits. I completely support the idea that authorities must consider the type of work to fix the retirement age.

First of all, Army personnel and defense staff always work for more 15 hours a day. Moreover, their job demands high standard of physical fitness and alertness. With such requirements one cannot work after 45 years whereas doctors and advocate could practice even at 65. Thus army men should get retire earlier.

Similarly, workers, working in mining industries such as coal mining, have to work in awful work conditions needs special consideration. Furthermore, such surroundings pose a serious threat to workers' health, For instance, in 2010 world health organization published a report that presented every year 1 million employees especially from mining business are diagnosed with lung cancer and the reason is inhalation of coal ashes. Hence, if mining workers are forced to work at their later age then their life expectancy would fall much shorter so they must retire earlier as compare to other professionals such as teachers.

In conclusion, it is the best approach to consider nature of the job for deciding the retirement age. As some types of workforce such as security and mining workers need special attention because of hazardous and tough working conditions which could have detrimental effect on their health so government should plan their early retirement.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 272, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...and advocate could practice even at 65. Thus army men should get retire earlier. ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 572, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...uch shorter so they must retire earlier as compare to other professionals such as ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, similarly, so, then, thus, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.5418719212 47% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 6.10837438424 196% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 8.36945812808 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 5.94088669951 67% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 20.9802955665 57% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 31.9359605911 91% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.75862068966 174% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1207.87684729 121% => OK
No of words: 273.0 242.827586207 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3663003663 5.00649968141 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 3.92707691288 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75156194398 2.71678728327 101% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 139.433497537 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637362637363 0.580463131201 110% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 379.143842365 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.71428571429 233% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.8569005206 50.4703680194 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.083333333 104.977214359 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.9669160288 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1666666667 7.25397266985 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280606117174 0.242375264174 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104273120324 0.0925447433944 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806208186225 0.071462118173 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172807927367 0.151781067708 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0907571013384 0.0609392437508 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 12.6369458128 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.1260098522 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.9458128079 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 11.5310837438 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.32886699507 106% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 55.0591133005 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.94827586207 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 72.0 Out of 90
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