Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
God creates our earth and it looked like a heaven, simple and naturalist. Day after day the world has developed and all things have changed due to the human inventions. They are many arguments about if the technology of the human makes the earth better or not. Many of them agree that the earth is getting better after what the human created, but in my view I think what the humans did due to their concoctions are the main reason for damaging our world.
First of all, No one can deny the grace of the technology for making our life easier than before, but at the same time it affects the earth so hard. The factories are the most common example for what I said before. Each of the country contains at least two or more factories and all know its dangers on the air that we breathe. The air that emitted from these factories was polluted due to the toxic gases that the humans used. So it’s a serious problem not only on the people’s health but also on the ozone layer that had a priority on all cities, since it’s really a dangerous problem that can cause increasing of the ultraviolet rays and then rising of earth temperature that lead to melt an ice all over the world and then flooding.
Second, the trees are the source of the beauty in the earth not just that, but it’s also help in absorbing of carbon dioxide emitted from factories and cars. Nowadays, the humans used the wood of tree for manufacturing the furniture and for another uses. So many of forests were disappear due to greed of the humans in the wealth of the nature, they deforested just to have wood, and they not worried about the nature and what will happen after this type of human activity.
Finally, exploring minerals and others raw materials contributed in damaging the earth, because humans used any type of equipment even if it effect on the nature, for instance the crushers that used in the mountain, all the green mountain distorted due to the human activities and careless with the environment.
To sum up, the technology brings to the human life many advantages, but due to the abuse of it, they contribute in destroying our environment..
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Sentence: Finally, exploring minerals and others raw materials contributed in damaging the earth, because humans used any type of equipment even if it effect on the nature, for instance the crushers that used in the mountain, all the green mountain distorted due to the human activities and careless with the environment.
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