TOEFL integrated writing: communal online encyclopedia

The article states that the communal online encyclopedia is less worthy than tradition and printed, because it have many problem due to additional changing that may effect its credibility, and provides three reasons of support. However the professor explains that communal online encyclopedia will never be prefect, but is not so bad as it mentioned in the reading, and she refutes each of the authors reasons.

First, the reading claims that communal online encyclopedia may contain many error and inaccurate information due to contribution of people whose haven't good and enough academic background in that field. The professor refutes this point by saying that nothing will be completely accurate,but in communal online encyclopedia it's hardly to find errors and if there are an errors it's easy to correct them compared with printed encyclopedia.

Second, the articles posits that the information in communal online encyclopedia can be change easily and replaced by fabricated information or even deleted the important and basic datum by hackers. However, the professor says that communal online encyclopedia was protected by special formats so no one can change any data that mentioned on it. in addition to the special editor that monitor any changes and fixed them.

Third, the reading says that traditional encyclopedia go deeply into every important details on the topic, in addition to the variety of information in opposite of online one. The professor opposes this point by explaining that spaces may limited the information that will mentioned on traditional encyclopedia, but in online encyclopedia the spacing is not an issue to restrict the data. it become more interested for many academic people due to huge variety of topics.

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Sentence: However the professor explains that communal online encyclopedia will never be prefect, but is not so bad as it mentioned in the reading, and she refutes each of the authors reasons.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: author's reasons

Sentence: The professor opposes this point by explaining that spaces may limited the information that will mentioned on traditional encyclopedia, but in online encyclopedia the spacing is not an issue to restrict the data. it become more interested for many academic people due to huge variety of topics.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to may and limited
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to will and mentioned

Sentence: However the professor explains that communal online encyclopedia will never be prefect, but is not so bad as it mentioned in the reading, and she refutes each of the authors reasons.
Error: prefect Suggestion: perfect

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 277 250
No. of Characters: 1447 1200
No. of Different Words: 141 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.08 4.3
Average Word Length: 5.224 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.817 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.721 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.486 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.741 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.215 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4