Watching television is bad for children.Do you agree or disagree , give reasons and examples.
Personally, I disagree with the statement watching television is bad for children.
To begin with , I think that television can play important role to educate children.Nowadays , there are many programs are made especially for children in the day schedule.They help children to increase awareness on language, nature sciences, math,music song and historical event of geological and astronomical events in chronological order - these programs ,I feel very helpful and play supportive role for their education and development.Consider an example, I saw in the TV that public Broadcasting service(PBS Kids) is offering children different variety of program including wild Krats and curious Gorge to educate and entertain children in the area of wild life, science,music and song and even in language to increase knowledge in these areas.
In addition to education, television helps children to become responsible citizen in the world.Children learn a lots of things from television so that it help them to understand the world well.When children only limited to their own culture and region, they learn very few things but if they see the television in broad area they get the opportunity to see the world as a whole in the area of culture, language, science and technology and anything new updating in the world and learn for how to become responsible citizen in the global perspective.For Example, our children are learning English language though they are originally from Nepali Language speaking country ,they are lerning new things around the word through the Television programs
Finally, in combination with education and responsible citizen, television help parent to foster or bringing up their children well.In today's busy world, parents have to do their job and other things to rearing and bearing of their children in most of their time and parents do not have enough time to guide and support in the study area as well as in other area.So these program which are guided by different educational specialist and have day time schedule are very beneficial to guide to the children in their off time from their parents.Also, even if they have time, they do not enough education to guide them in the proper way.
Considering the issue of children and television, I have explored education ,responsible citizen and help to parent for growing up their children.These factors lead me to disagree with the statement that television is bad for children.Actually television may have both positive and negative effect as other thing like friends and relatives .if children see too much negative things as well as late night program may spoil their sleep may sleeping disorder and other problem as well.Otherwise I find it good and more beneficial for them.
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Sentence: Children learn a lots of things from television so that it help them to understand the world well.
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Sentence: If children see too much negative things as well as late night program may spoil their sleep may sleeping disorder and other problem as well.
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Sentence: For Example, our children are learning English language though they are originally from Nepali Language speaking country, they are lerning new things around the word through the Television programs
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