Work is a great virtue that has to be always encouraged, yet, the question that many people have controversial views to it is how early should it be encouraged? In my opinion, with adequate monitoring & proper legalisations, teenage is the best time to start, whereas others disagree with this notion. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of views.
People who disagree with the early engagement of teens in part-time work argue that this violate their child right of being supported & dependant until the age of 21. They also propose that it opens opportunity wide for child abuse as those teens deal with empowered adult employers jeopardising their safety. In the same instance, they support their notion by the last World Health Organisation child work & abuse census that clearly denotes their close association.
On the other hand, as convincing as the former point of view sounds, it only considers safety issues & ignores the other child rights & needs to thrive & unleash his capabilities in order to mature healthily. As teens have great energy at its peak, it would be much more jeopardising if they were left unguided wandering with all of this uninvested energy to waste in all the wrong places exposing them to a more serious unmonitored type of abuse. Thus, if country-wide programs were implemented by the government & supported & monitored by proper legalisations & censorship hierarchy, safety issues & child abuse odds would be put to a minimum and teens energies would be invested wisely the way that shape their personalities maturely, which will, at last, be in favour of the whole society.
In conclusion, teenage engagement in part-time work raises some safety issues that, in my opinion, can easily be contained by proper legalisations & censorship in favour of their work & thrive.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...y, I will discuss both sides of views. people who disagree with the early engagement ...
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Line 2, column 339, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a child'.
Suggestion: Who is a child
..., they support their notion by the last WHO child work & abuse census that clearly denote...
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Line 3, column 446, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...more serious unmonitored type of abuse. thus, if country-wide programs were implemen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, thus, whereas, as to, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1468.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16901408451 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82657877156 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588028169014 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.2975951904 197% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 140.487925256 49.4020404114 284% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 209.714285714 106.682146367 197% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.5714285714 20.7667163134 195% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120917401338 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669792365343 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392196120448 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0882690603942 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051913893933 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.2 13.0946893788 177% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.88 50.2224549098 61% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 11.3001002004 167% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.1190380762 178% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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