The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams demonstrates the online shopping sales for retail categories in Canada for 5 years (2005 to 2010). The scale is in percentage.

First and foremost, in 2005 the consumption of online shopping sale for retail sectors of electronics and appliances were highest which was 35%. However, in 2010 it decline to 5% from previous years. Food and beverage was boon to 32% and in 2005 it was fall down to 22% which was grow up to almost 10% in 2010.

Moreover, the expenditure of home furnishings was 25% in 2005 but in 2010 the utilisation of home furnishings reduce to almost by 10%. Last the category is video game and it peak at 23% in 2010 and in 2005 it was dip which was 18%. It was a difference of 5% between both the year.

Overall, the category which carries highest percentage in 2005 is electronic and applications and lowest was video game. Although in 2010 the category which have more weightage was food and brevagers and the lower was home furnishings.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 805.0 965.302439024 83% => OK
No of words: 173.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65317919075 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68374972998 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520231213873 0.547539520022 95% => OK
syllable_count: 229.5 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2049727859 43.030603864 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5 112.824112599 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3 22.9334400587 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3 5.23603664747 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163573573724 0.215688989381 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792558892593 0.103423049105 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100839491095 0.0843802449381 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138195344875 0.15604864568 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103676206885 0.0819641961636 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.2329268293 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 61.2550243902 130% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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