Some people believe that childre should learn to paint or draw at school.others believe that it is just a waste of time.Discuss both views and give your opinion
'The purpose of art is washing the dust of daily life off our souls'. In the current time of technological advancement, one of the most pressing concerns is regarding the believe of some people that children should learn to paint or draw at school. In contrast to this, others believe that it is just a wastage of time. I shall explore the dimensions of this topic through examples and assertions and shape up my opinion by the end.
On one side, there is a group of people who believe that juveniles should learn to paint or draw at school. By doing drawing and painting at school minds of children should remain fresh. As by participating in exta curricular activities childre always feel fresh and active. Due to this freshness of mind students perform exceptionally good in acedemic exams. According to a survey made by asia plus, academic performance of children who use to do painting and drawing at school is much better as compared to those who do not participate in drawing and painting.
Contrary to this, there is an opposing group of people who believe that drawing or painting is just a waste of time. To make their arguements convincing they claim that there is no career in the field of art. Most parents believe that painting or drawing is distracting students from studies. According to a survey conducted by Hindustan times, it is revealed that nine out of ten students drop the field they want to choose under pressure of parents.
Overall, it is concluded that childre should be ask about the field they want to choose. Juveniles should be give freedom from the parents about choosing the stream they like. So that they can turn it into their profession. If students choose the field in which they are interested, they can perform in extraordinary way to make their future bright.
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- Some people believe that childre should learn to paint or draw at school.others believe that it is just a waste of time.Discuss both views and give your opinion 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: belief
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Message: Did you mean 'asked'?
Suggestion: asked
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Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ts about choosing the stream they like. So that they can turn it into their profession....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, regarding, so, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1495.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77635782748 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61875612004 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517571884984 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8348667501 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.9411764706 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4117647059 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.70588235294 7.06120827912 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341218649719 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111924847867 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126975846178 0.0667982634062 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199068777893 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0945764042381 0.056905535591 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.