In many countries senior positions have higher salaries compared to those of young workers of the same company. Some people think this isn’t justified. Do you agree or disagree?

Submitted by spgarg04 on Sat, 06/30/2018 - 04:54

Many corporates offer significantly higher remunerations to the senior and middle executive class than the junior workforce. While many people feel that it is an appropriate rule, not everyone agrees to this. In my opinion, I agree that these executives should be rewarded with a better compensation than the entry-level employees for several reasons.

Firstly, the senior management is responsible to take key decisions to make the business thrive. These decisions, if proven wrong, could damage the career of these officials. Hence, they always live at the risk of being axed. Secondly, they are accountable to flourish the business with growing sales figures. Managing the sales and profitability is not an easy task considering the competition. The economic conditions, global policies play a major role in the growth of a company. For instance, some conglomerates incurred huge losses due to a change in the USA trade practices. The leadership teams are the first one to bear the brunt of the financial instabilities caused by such changes. Finally, the management employees need to keep themselves abreast of the technological and other developments in order to match the expectations of the diversified portfolio set by the board of directors. They are required to work very hard to constantly enhance their products and related services. Above reasons, justify the better salaries of senior executives.

It is true, that some junior employees also deserve sufficient rewards as they play key roles in the success of the business. However, they also get equal opportunities to step up in the ladder by outperforming their peers. Given the capability of resource, sooner or later he would be promoted to receive salary growth.

To conclude, the greater responsibilities of leadership justify their higher pay packages. Every younger employee is given a fair chance to reach up in the hierarchy and it is up to the individual's skill set to grab this opportunity.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 187, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...up in the hierarchy and it is up to the individuals skill set to grab this opportunity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in my opinion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29617834395 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07657323203 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627388535032 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2966187464 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5263157895 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5263157895 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26315789474 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108668723272 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0304234621579 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394522249456 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0641119845361 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409892763186 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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